I sat and sat and sat, trying to write an emotionally releasing piece for two days whilst there was a storm coming then going with small moments of reprieve in my house. I stared at the screen, I wrote and deleted, I tried to vent... but instead I gave up and wrote this instead. Feel free to comment :)
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Things and emotions get confusing at times. Vents become rants, then guilts, then confessions and then silence as we work it to the point of letting go. This was to your Author's note.
This is to the poem - Clarity helps define what we want to say the most. I didn't laugh, I merely understood.
" rain bucketed down" one of many, but most memorable. There are times when "yes dear' just don't hack it. Hang on tight and try begging. Great write, good luck. Tom
Things and emotions get confusing at times. Vents become rants, then guilts, then confessions and then silence as we work it to the point of letting go. This was to your Author's note.
This is to the poem - Clarity helps define what we want to say the most. I didn't laugh, I merely understood.
this poem is written with a lot of good imagery. Not often is there a storm i paradise. it draws the reader into it.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Heather. Luckily there isn't many storms in my paradise either, it is rare that I .. read moreThank you so much Heather. Luckily there isn't many storms in my paradise either, it is rare that I need to find cover from a woman scorned :)
i really enjoyed the poem. great imagery and the comic timing totally unexpected yet briliant. I felt a connection with this piece of writing maybe because i am from a Island Nation myself. Awesome work.
Love it...
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your kind review, I'm glad you liked it. I actually thought this one wasn't th.. read moreThank you so much for your kind review, I'm glad you liked it. I actually thought this one wasn't that good out of all my writes, but its nice to know that it is liked and enjoyed by others. Ohhh nice! I bet its lovely living on an island. My mind often wanders to such places, as I am stuck in a hospital room. Thank you for reviewing :)
wow the use of imagery in this poem is breathtaking... i really enjoyed the poem. I felt as though I was a part of the setting, that I was really there, watching the storm brewing... and to top it all off, the ending was really unexpected. i love the last line, makes me think and reflect on what i've just read. great read.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your kind review, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
11 Years Ago
You're welcome. You did a great job :) Pleasure to read.
Haha! What did you do to make the woman angry? I like the humor in this, had a good laugh at the end. Watch out for a woman scorned, we can be terrifying when we need to be :P Hope the storm has passed and paradise has returned to a pleasant place of peace and sunshine. Nice comment on relationships.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Haha, I didn't have to do anything, it was just tiredness and stress mainly :p I'm innocent you see .. read moreHaha, I didn't have to do anything, it was just tiredness and stress mainly :p I'm innocent you see haha. Thank you for your review and yes paradise is restored :D *phew*
Hi everyone, I am a lyricist, a poet, a survivor and a letter C warrior. If you wish to get to know me then read my poetry as it is based on my inner most feelings, my life experiences and the pieces.. more..