Peter Pan and the Orphan

An orphan's dream once dreamt.

When I was young I wanted to be

Just like Peter Pan

He is an orphan too you see

But he resides in Neverland

 

A beautiful and ageless place

With pirates and fairies

Filled with wonder and with grace

A place a child was free

 

I sat alone, wondering

Gazing up at the clouds

Silently pondering

How to get there somehow

 

I lived inside a concrete tomb

Where I could hardly breathe

While Peter Pan just up and flew

I was longing to be freed

 

Orphans left abandoned here

In this darkened hell

Wishing we could fly up there

Where happiness was sure to dwell

 

Trapped, alone, indefinitely

My pain and suffering was enjoyed

My tormentors, my only company

I was destined to remain a Lost Boy

 

Wishing on the second Star,

The brightest light

My savior would come from afar

Gliding through the night

And leave my window ajar

 

And be stolen out of the bed

Blanket laid on cold concrete

No more tears to be shed

If Peter Pan, I did meet

 

I always listened for the Tink

The beautiful ring so clear

Of Tinkerbell a tinkering

Music to my ears

 

As time dragged out I lost faith

It would never materialize

A fairy dropped, met her fate

As the truth I realized

 

There was no tick tock crocodile

To slay Captain Hook

My dreams deemed infantile

An orphan’s happiness

Existing only in a book…

Author's Note

Let me know what you think :) Cheers.

Reviews

[bobc]

A child's wish to be somehow rescued. It takes a lot of real emotional work to sort through those feelings when we grow up.

Some poems are just harder to review. I think this is one of them. The subject of the piece and the deeply personal approach to it I find honourable. I can only stand back and admire the fortitude it took to survive and the courage displayed in writing about it today.

Thank you...bob

[DJ]

yes it sure does take a lot of work, I think I will be working through it for the rest of my life. But these experiences have certainly made me stronger and built my character.

I thank you for reading it over and I understand where you are coming from when you say it is difficult to review. Thank you for your words of kindness, they are very touching. I appreciate you taking the time to look :)

[London's Lily]

Even though the story told is an unhappy one, the poetry itself is quite beautiful. Given what I've learned about you today, I'm filled with more admiration than before ~ you could have grown up full of rage, resentment, and hatred, yet you appear to be the complete opposite despite all you've been through. Remarkable. :)

[DJ]

Wow, thank you so much Lily... your words really touched my heart and I thank you from the bottom of soul for that. Lots of children turned out to be hateful in adulthood, with good reason. I chose not to let it consume me, it would just end up ruining my life and affecting me more than anyone else. I see it as a test, one that can make you or break you. It built my character and although I am still affected there has much some positive come out of it all. I have empathy and love for everyone who my path crosses with. When I have children, they will be raised the opposite of how I was, I am going to give them the most loving home I can and be the best parent I can be. My past taught me how NOT to raise a child, therefore I now know what to do to ensure they know they are loved and looked after. Thank you so much Lily, you are a beautiful soul.

[London's Lily]

Aww! ♥ You are most welcome, and thank *you* for your kind words in return. I think a lot of us learn how *not* to raise a child, which is almost the strangest mixed blessing, if you think about it... still quite a price to pay, of course, but someday there are going to be very, very loved children as a result. :)

[DJ]

So true, I like the way you think :) It is a price to pay that's for sure, one that I feel might be worth it once I have a family of my own.

[Douglas White]

This is so familiar to me. I remember similar thoughts as a child. This here is a top-notch example of touching upon feelings and childhood memories (Peter Pan) that we all have in common. Sometimes they are hard to write, sometimes easy, but when you can touch the audience on this level, the words just -shine-. Definitely a worthwhile read.

[DJ]

Thank you so much Douglas, your review means a lot to me, I appreciate the time you have taken to read my work and the kindness of your words my friend.

[Reggie Sapphire]

wow, i related to the emotions of this poem, i love books and would love to do adventures to do more live more and fullfill my dreams, but then you ll just realize that its nothing but fantasy , an imagination, but if we do did not dreamed/imagined our lives would be gray .
i remember being trapped to , not literally but the fact that you cant just jump out your window and just fly and seek puremjoy. wishing that books are just real, to live in it but as time goes by they are just books, they say but the memories still remains
More Power :))

[DJ]

Yes you're right, it would be nice to live the adventures that we read about or see in movies but sometimes when you realize it is fantasy it takes the magic away. We need to keep that dreaming spirit alive. I remember when I was in the orphanage, I always dreamt that I was Peter Pan, I still have a fascination with him now as an adult, some dreamers never cease :)

[Katho28]

wow.. another superb poem.. I felt every word... amazing at how the words were able to evoke so much emotion within me.. profound and simply, amazing :)

[DJ]

Thank you my friend, I'm glad that for you, emotions were evoked :)

[Nkosana B Masuku]

An eloquently written poem and i feel your emotion which you expressed beautifully

[DJ]

Thank you so much Nkosana!

[Nkosana B Masuku]

my pleasure

[Electric Scribe]

BANGARANG Cario! This too is one of my favorite stories of magic, adventure, and unexpressed love. Second star to the right straight on until morning. I was looking for something relating that and was so happy you had it included. Wonderful poem, it speaks for all the magic we believe in as kids. Our minds and hearts know without a doubt and nothing will tell us differently that Neverland is a real place. That the Santa is real and takes gifts to every boy and girl in one night. And somewhere in a Galaxy far far away..... The underling forces of light will battle against the dark side of the force. Good write it made me very happy. Go you!

[DJ]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! I love Peter Pan too, one of the best fairy tales ever written! Stop by anytime!

[J. Kell]

Beautiful, this made me tear up. Seems like you have been through a great deal.Imagination and faith can be powerful tools for children to use to cope with a situation.

[DJ]

Thank you, I am glad you liked it. Yes I have, but it has made me stronger and I wouldn't be writing if not for the pain I have experienced. Thank you for your kindness

[Vani Jalagar]

“I will not leave you orphans, I will come to you.” saying from a sacred book. Nothing happens to you except in accordance with GOD's will. Anyone who believes in GOD, He will guide his heart. GOD is fully aware of all things.
As usual I love to read your writings until the end of time.........:-)

[DJ]

Thank you so much Vani. What sacred book are you referring to? Totally agree with you :)

[Vani Jalagar]

I was referring to Bible dear :)

[DJ]

Oh sorry, I didn't know whether it was the Bible, Quran or Torah. Thank you.

[zaneybear]

"An orphan’s happiness

Existing only in a book…"

my favorite lines, because it's just the entire poem you're wanting to be free but sadly at the end it's come to a realization that it's only in books where it can happen:/ beautifuly written though.

[DJ]

Thanks Zaney! Yes books and fairytales, sadly they give out false hope because the world is nothing like them.

[zaneybear]

unfortunately, I just hate how people have to find out that fairytales aren't the truth in life :/ it's sad, but it makes one who they are and it will either make or break them, stay strong doll:)

[DJ]

Completely agree! It can make or break. Fortunately for me, I made a choice to not let it break me. Still going strong! :D

[zaneybear]

that's the best thing to hear:)