what you have written is true and the imagery behind it fillied my eyes and heart with tears yet again.
i fill for the children like the boy you speak of and has always been a dream to adopt a child and one day i will.
this is a brilliant peace of writing. you are awesome..
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Jennifer, yes it is true, emotional memories of my childhood. That is really awesome, I ho.. read moreThank you Jennifer, yes it is true, emotional memories of my childhood. That is really awesome, I hope to adopt some day too. Make it easier for a child whom through no fault of their own was left, unloved and not cared for. Thank you so much for your kind words. They truly touch my heart.
Very touching Cairo, ' Stripped of clothes and dignity, severed wings can’t fly', a powerful line, hit the chord in a most poignant way as it's meant too!
what you have written is true and the imagery behind it fillied my eyes and heart with tears yet again.
i fill for the children like the boy you speak of and has always been a dream to adopt a child and one day i will.
this is a brilliant peace of writing. you are awesome..
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you Jennifer, yes it is true, emotional memories of my childhood. That is really awesome, I ho.. read moreThank you Jennifer, yes it is true, emotional memories of my childhood. That is really awesome, I hope to adopt some day too. Make it easier for a child whom through no fault of their own was left, unloved and not cared for. Thank you so much for your kind words. They truly touch my heart.
This is awfully sad poem. Beautifully written, I could't help by share some of the feelings this boy with no name felt. I had a name, same as my father, a father whom could show no love. More night then night, some how I would get in the way and becoming a punching bag, or sometimes much worse, as I have burns on my back from being held on a burner. The pain this child felt is so immense and real for me that I shared in the ride. Never forgetting how horrible it feels to look at the moon at night and wish every night to just die. Like I said beautifully written but so much pain, it would be hard to read again.
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11 Years Ago
I am so sorry to hear about your pain my friend. I know that pain well, although not from parents, f.. read moreI am so sorry to hear about your pain my friend. I know that pain well, although not from parents, from the people who ran the orphanage I grew up in. I have scars, not only on my soul but on my body. What I am trying to say is, I don't know your pain, but I understand how that pain feels.
On a brighter note, it has made you become an amazing, kind, beautiful soul. As hard as it is to overcome such horrors endured over childhood, it creates the most amazing of people. I am blessed to know you my friend. You are one of the most positive people I have met on here. Stay strong and thank you for reviewing my work :)
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Thank you for such kind words in return. You in return have an amazing soul! I have noticed that i.. read moreThank you for such kind words in return. You in return have an amazing soul! I have noticed that it is hit or miss with people whom have had this pain. Sometimes the most beautifully inspired, all life loving indivdules, or the opposite, dark resentful, and destructive. I believe we are kindred spirits and I am glad you know love now. You have people on this site whom are drawn to you and care very much. I am certain in the physical world is just as full as love from all those you touch. Stay strong, keep fighting hard, because we all love you.
I don't have fancy words for this review. I don't have many words at all, actually, and it's rare that I'm rendered speechless. I'm so angry that this happens, and angrier that it's happened to you. You're going through enough, let alone having to bear the burden of these being your childhood memories. It sickens me.
I am a person who holds an overwhelming amount of compassion and love for all children. Not just, "Aww, kids are cute," but rather, "If I wasn't confined to a 900 sq ft house, I'd bring in every foster child within a 7,000 mile radius because I cannot bear the thought of any child going to sleep without a proper kiss goodnight and a song or bedtime story." I'm *that* crazy about children, and obsessive over their need to be shown that they're cared for.
Well, then. Perhaps I wasn't speechless after all. I do apologize. Another poem of yours that I both love and hate, for the same reasons as before: I love how you wrote it, I hate that you had to. *double hugs*
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11 Years Ago
Aww, you are such a kind and loving soul Lily. We need more beautiful people like you in the world. .. read moreAww, you are such a kind and loving soul Lily. We need more beautiful people like you in the world. Thank you for reviewing this and I understand what you mean when you say you hate it and love it at the same time. Thank you for your words of comfort, they warm my heart. Any child would be lucky to have you in their lives and it is the intention that matters. The if you could you would, just shows the character you have. *hugs*
I spent a few months in the foster care system when I was 8, and I was placed with a "good Christian family" - yeah, right. This poem hits home, and hard, reminding me of my own experiences with "good Christian values" that were really just an excuse for two sadistic people to vent on helpless children.
This was a hard poem to read, honestly. For that reason, you need to know that it does exactly what it needed to. I wouldn't change a thing with this work, as harsh as it is. I know EXACTLY how hard it was to write this, but thank you for doing so.
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11 Years Ago
I am so sorry for your pain my friend. I am sorry you can relate to this. Sadly, orphans and those p.. read moreI am so sorry for your pain my friend. I am sorry you can relate to this. Sadly, orphans and those placed in foster care are often treated like animals by those in "power" and those people often hide like cowards behind religion. I'm sorry this hit a personal nerve with you. I hate knowing that others suffered similar abuse, it makes me sick. Thank you for your review, I understand completely how hard and emotional it must have been for you to read. If you ever need an ear to listen I'm here. I hope that you found happiness and joy now you are out of that place.
woah, i just began frozen, as if time just stopped, your words like arrows into my heart, its just that moment when theres no one to help you, no one to save you, no one to bless you but your self. and "
in a desperate need of embrace" .
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Reggie. I'm glad that you were able to connect to the piece. Yes that moment brings some o.. read moreThank you Reggie. I'm glad that you were able to connect to the piece. Yes that moment brings some of the most difficult emotions I have ever had to face. Physical wounds heal, but the emotional are always there, their mark survives through-out time. Thank you for the review :)
this poem was incredibly sad... it reached my heart. even though I've never been through something like this, i felt everything as I read this poem. You have this ability to make every word real, and for that moment, I'm there... and there's so much pain...
Incredible work.
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Thank you, it is real for me, so for a moment, while you were in it, you were sharing my pain. Thank.. read moreThank you, it is real for me, so for a moment, while you were in it, you were sharing my pain. Thank you for understanding the emotion in this piece.
The news and media aren't always reliable, however, sadly it is one of the only ways people even kno.. read moreThe news and media aren't always reliable, however, sadly it is one of the only ways people even know of such things. Thank you bob :)
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watch Silence in the House of God. May give u a better idea of the abuse in not just orphanages, but.. read morewatch Silence in the House of God. May give u a better idea of the abuse in not just orphanages, but the religious institutions claiming to be holy, but abusing the very kids who rely on them.
nice thoughts . I remember childhood days. I've seen destiny playing with children's life. I've seen sufferings of babies that are dumped brutally. In fact I've come across it.
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11 Years Ago
I'm sorry for your experiences :( So have I, this was written from personal experience but it sadden.. read moreI'm sorry for your experiences :( So have I, this was written from personal experience but it saddens me that you can relate. Thank you for your comment.
Hi everyone, I am a lyricist, a poet, a survivor and a letter C warrior. If you wish to get to know me then read my poetry as it is based on my inner most feelings, my life experiences and the pieces.. more..