In Bed Without You

 

 

Stareing at the ceiling,

     cigarette smoking.

          Central air rumbling.

     The jazz cassette you

     couldn't stand cascading

     through borrowed boom box.

     I remember you don't like

     letting music lull-you-a-bye.

     That I thought this might

     come between us seems

     silly now that we have the 

                                 Atlantic.

Reviews

[PianoandPage]

cah. ok. so you have this really amazing talent of saying a lot with very little and yet keeping those few lines sharp and inspired with poetic originality and heart. i am envious of your talent.

my favorite line is definately

"The jazz cassette you
couldn't stand cascading
through borrowed boom box" - i love how you talk about jazz music "cascading" cause it totally does. lol.

also "lull-a-you-bye" is just (pardon the language) f*****g brilliant.

[W.k.kortas]

Spare, but not too much so, and very wry. The detached tone is a bit odd, but it works. Very solid little piece of writing.

[Chuck]

I love this it is ver personal and perfect, but can still be related to..

Fantastic!

-Chuck

[jaime]

I'm melting (once again).

Add that to the list of my favorites of yours.