Shoot your love on me

The prison of my mind

And echo

And then you come onto me

Shoot me with your love

Like a gun

A creamy dream

To set me free

Reviews

[Andreea_is_real]

Sort of pathetic human nature not to present any capability whatsoever to escape the highly limited freedom unless the portal of love opens up, innit? And you say my writing is idiotic....

Andreea out.

[Haley]

I'm into it (I don't know what else to say to make it 25 characters as that summarizes my feelings on this)

[CLR9]

Yeah, it's probably my finest work.

[Richard🖌]

Short and sad, Poet … yet (in the end), sensually, gratifyingly sweet. 😏

I like your word choices and syntactic flow, imagery, and keen metaphors … clearly gets the message across, and that's more than many on here do.
L3, did you mean "then"?

Thanks for sharing your stuff! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[CLR9]

nah L3, no idea what ur talkin about dawg
I am a literary genius.

[Richard🖌]

I might've known as much. 🤔
Nice correction, tho'.

[CLR9]

reed my other pomes if you dare. I pretty much rule. I might get a poemtry contract soon.

[Richard🖌]

One can only hope.
Thanks for the invite … think I'll take you up on it. 😊