Dreamer

A poem i wrote one night when constant dreams interupted my ever so cherrished sleeping patterns, a sure insiration for a piece.

Hey Dreamer.

 

Drifting away from your troubles

escaping the pain of the day

Chasing the thought of a new world

a mind, set so far away

redefining the depths of reality

as your dreams become your home

finding comfort away from the fears once lived

so whole, yet so much alone

travelling beyond your limits

as the physical becomes the past

an oasis, your perfection

so real, but unlikely to last

your definition of what is beauty

as your heart and soul collides

though when weakness decides to take over

in your dreams is where you hide.

Author's Note

dont worry about grammar im purely interested in material value.

Reviews

[L.G. Knight]

This is really well done I felt through the poem that you were speaking to me because I am such a dreamer... the rhyme and flow is fantastic and sometimes when you have that you don't need grammar nicely done! thanks for entering it in the Sleepless Night Contest...

~Frances~

[J.e. Doherty]

I'm a fan of grammar too but I don't think there is anything distracting in this poem. It flows and is full of emotion. I like it. Sometimes grammer isn't necessary, just ask ee cummings.


Jeff

[kree8ivity]

Hello CDoh,
I see the author's note...
Grammar is super important to the poetic power of prose. It is impossible to seperate the value of a piece of writing from grammar and spelling and stuff--intension is laced into the value of all artwork--if you ignore grammar and the like, you give up your intentional capabilities; bcuz look @ it this way, it is very distracting 2 c gramatical erors, speling erors, & NEthing strange or abnormal. Your reader is not only yourself, if you care about the readers who are not yourself, then you must understand that they rely on you to communicate well what is in your mind.
This poem says something about you. I am a dreamer too, I can relate to this poem. But I am also a writer, and this poem has very distracting grammatical issues and it could be made into something more beautiful. Some poems can't be made more beautiful, they just suck. Let's face it, some people don't even have something worth writing but they try anyway. What you've written is worthwhile--I hope you reconsider the way you look at constructive criticism as you and your writing would benefit greatly.

Take care, man. No offense or jerkness was intended here :) I'm just a caffeinated insomniac stumbling around and giving feedback to the writers who have newly joined the cafe.