Evidence

 

 

tiny handprints on every surface

toys, books, and teddy bears all in surplus

cute little jeans and little man socks

playthings everywhere except the toy box

 

peek-a-boo and chase the ball

crayon scribbles on the wall

 

trails of crumbs from his lunch

milk and juice spills-there's a bunch

tid-bits of food here and there

some spaghetti sauce in momma's hair

 

bath tub toys in the sink

kitchen floor's like an ice-skating rink

 

in every room is evidence of baby

especially in the heart of this lady!

Reviews

[Lily1111]

What a delightful glimpse into the life of a mother with an energetic little one! Enjoy every messy minute of it, it passes far too quickly.

[S.E. Conway]

i feel for this. it reminds me of my neice, and how i pictured life would be with my daughter, but god didn't want that to happen, so it didn't.

very well written.

[forfila]

Sweet and cute, I liked the way it came out. Was a nice read Carrie=)

[Janyce Helen Van Es]

Gee, Carrie...hire a maid!

Joking, of course.
Sweet poem about your child; an awful lot of work keeping up with him, I'm sure.

"everywhere" is one word

Funny: My baby is 35 and HIS (and his wife's) house looks like that and he hasn't any children, ha-ha.

[Forest Green]

Oh my...now that was sweet. 'Kitchen floor an ice skating rink..'

Man, this is one special poem...!!

Thank you for the send. I'll add it to my list. ;)

Daniel

[Prose-full]

aww..this is so cute...i love it..
love the detailed descriptions
i almost "fell" walking through your kitchen.....lol

great write carrie....
very nice....

[Yvonne Heidt]

Oh Carrie - I LOVED this. It's adorable and so is the picture! Is that your baby?

I could definitely see this published in a Woman's magazine...

[Nicholas Hallows]

With the title 'Evidence' I was almost expecting this description to turn into a crime scene with an evil twist at the end. I must say I am glad it didn't. Although maybe you could do an alternate ending? :)
You paint this colourful picture very well. I can only imagine what it is like to live in this kind of scene, but your poem helps a lot with that.
Nice work.
NH

[Imperfection]

I haven't gone through the experience of being a mom but I have been witness to a lot of such evidence - children of friend's and relatives. So I can certainly picture the scene. Very well described. This is exactly how the house looks like when there's a child around.
Cute picture too.

Lovely write Carrie.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh Carrie you tug at my heart strings with this one, never having kids myself I haven't had these experiences but with this I got a great glimpse of what it would have been like.