You Say...

You say I've found my Prince Charming;

The gallant knight to rescue me.

You say I was lost without him; 

But I feel lost around him.

You say I've finally found myself;

Yet I feel as though I'm someone else.

You say my actions are my own;

But you orchestrate my every move.

You say I'm in charge of my life;

Yet I'm a simple bystander, nothing more.

You say I speak my mind and make myself heard;

But, how can I without a voice to listen for? 

You say I'm surrounded by friends;

Yet I've never been more alone.

You say you hear me;

But the voice that speaks is not my own.

You say I tread my own path;

Yet, I've always tread the path you made.

You say I'm free;

But a cage is all I see.

Author's Note

Here's another poem I'm placing at your mercy. Tear it apart, nit-picking encouraged!
Love,
CreativeCookie

Reviews

[GalaxyGhost]

Basically, we must be our own heroes in the end. It's up to ourselves to be our own person and to create our story, our own journey.

[marilyn 1225]

seems like a good description of being at the mercy o a control freak who wants to make you meet his or her standards,,, very well written and love the last two sentences... being in a cage

[Anahat]

It was beautiful and emotional....as if you described something happened with you..:)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Filled with depth and emotion.
I could feel your feelings with every line.
You really put some thought into this one.
Was written straight from your heart, which always makes for the best writes :)

[Criss ;)]

Nice flow of ink, i'm glad to read your work once again. It's an emotional piece that came from the heart and poured some purity's of reality into the poetic words. At starting level there was rhyme then suddenly you took a turn to a beauty of the piece of life and jotted some powerful words with some great intention to let other know about the piece of truth which's still exiting in the life. It's really a heartfelt piece which's further making a piece more realistic to read and feel and to think about it in more deeply. I loved how you did start with your great title and how you did end the piece with the great meaning of title as well as the all words you used in the piece making it more beautiful.

[CreativeCookie]

Thank you, Criss, I always look forward to your reviews!

[Criss ;)]

Your welcome, Even me too always love reading your nice stuffs. Keep writing!

[Criss ;)]

And, yeh, of course, Cookiee, I love to give you reviews!

[Playing with Demons]

Very elegant in a kind of modern way! I love how you said orchestrate, it made the character different and more real than those obnoxious teens on Dr. Phil!!!
I love it!!
Cheerio!

[Hypnos]

Wonderfully done my friend. Your poem reminds me of the Fates. They orchestrate every detail of life in the universe, and they make it seem like we have no free will at all.