Solace

Just another poem i came up with in the spur of a moment :)

I find peace…

 

In those broken, battered

Worn out, tattered

memories

And in all of those empty

useless promises

That I’d never keep

 

I find comfort...

 

In distant memories of you

That have faded into

Glimpses in my mind

Filling me with a warmth

I never thought I’d feel...

again

 

And while I long to hear your laughs

Tofeel those un-hushed tears on my cold skin

While i miss the way your warm breath

Tickles my cold cheeks

I’ll treasure those distant memories

For all eternity

 

And I’ll find solace

Perfect solace

In me

Author's Note

This poem was inspired by Sapientiam's This Cold, Beautiful Life :). It really made me reflect. Make sure to check it out, review it, love it, and have a nice day.

Reviews

[Sapientiam]

Oh my...

First off, you amazed me by the structure of the stanzas. Each line seemed to never end, continuing the emotions expressed, as if they would never disappear. I can't really explain it right, but it was something that caught my eye.

Second, as I progressed through the poem, I kept looking at the picture. I love how you told more of a story than just the feeling of contentment through tragedy. Those phases of life matched perfectly the tale that you told and it made the poem stronger as a whole.

Lastly, the message. What is so precious about life is that things are never eternal. While that may seem despairing to some, it is actually quite a beautiful thing. Our memories gives our lives value and meaning, to look back on those days of happiness and just... Appreciate what life has given us, despite the fact that it was also taken away. This truly touched me and you should be proud of yourself.

Wonderful job, Raysira!

[Sira YR]

Thank you for the thoughtful and constructive review :), Sapientiam. I really appreciate your feedback.

[Sira YR]

Oh and i really loved ur poem as well :)

[An owl on the moon]

So deeply moving, finding this peace in distant fragments of thought, these memories of life and light. I can relate well to your words, dear poet.

[William Liston]

Wow ... this is an amazing write. Like Sapientiam, I loved how you structured your stanzas. It allowed your words to resonate with such clarity and emotion. You also did a great job at turning the piece from sorrowful to cathartic at the end.
Great work, and I'll be sure to read the piece that inspired this one!

- William Liston

[Sapientiam]

Ah... I actually deleted it, so you probably won't find it. Sorry about that! I wasn't very pleased about the outcome of the poem...

[Rachid Amrani]

Solace! That's one of my favorite words in the English language! In your poem, you guide us to where we could find it. With it comes peace and comfort. Very deep thoughts and powerful words and a well-structured poem. Thank you for sharing.
Rachid