ROPE

ROPE

A Story by CAPOLAVORO
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A bittersweet moment for a guy who knows more than just death.

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I cannot hide the sadness on my face as I entered their house. The pain and the agony of loosing someone you truly love and someone you want to tie a knot with is eating my whole being.
Some people are staring at me but my eyes are glued at her coffin. The pain. I can't hold it anymore.  People called me a tough guy but this time everything in me seems to be soft. My everything is gone. The hot tears rolling down my eyes. It's like my heart stop beating. She owns it and she took it with her.

I slowly walk towards it.

I tried to touch the coffin and slowly looked at her pale face. Everything is emotionally difficult. I wanted to touch her face but the small glass window is not allowing me to feel her face once again. My hands are trembling above it. I wanted to shout. I wanted to kneel down in front of her and ask one more chance from God to have her. She is my everything. She is my all. My body is not allowing me to move. It is stunned to see her face with no life.

A touch on my arm brought me back to reality. "I know how you feel". her mother's sad face is not clear to me as tears keep falling on my eyes. I can't say anything. I just looked at her for a second and turned my sight back to my beloved. How I feel? It doesn't matter anymore. All I care is for her to be alive again. Memories keep flashing in my mind. Her smile. Her laugh. Her pretty looking face and eyes. It was a sweet sound and sight for me that brings happiness and smile on my face. Now, it brings pain and suffering. Like heart being nailed again and again every time I remember those memories.

I was about to whisper something to my beloved when I heard a guy saying something that made me angry. "That girl deserves to be murdered. I believe the reason why the murderer strangled her with a rope in the forest is because she is a nagger. Everyone hates her. Anyone could thank the murderer for that." The guy said mockingly to his friends.

On impulse, I throw a punch at his face and broke off his nose. I looked at him with a hard stare. I want to pour all my hatred towards him at that moment but a lot of people are trying to stop us. Some are holding my shoulders. "What the-!". I heard the man said.

I want to punch him real bad so that he could feel how hurt I am for saying things like that to my beloved. I was about to give him another but then I saw my fiancee's mother face on the side looking so sad. I felt embarrassed loosing my patience in their house.

I walked out. I walked out and into the forest where my beloved was killed. I shouted and cry. I knelt down as tears poured in my eyes. I was exhausted from all the sleepless nights and pain.

I then remembered something on my pocket.

I took it out. It's the rope that I used.

I slowly smiled and released an evil laugh.


© 2017 CAPOLAVORO


Author's Note

CAPOLAVORO
I don't know if you'll like this one. I hope you do. I just want to try suspense and see if I am an effective writer on this kind. ;)

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You are an effective writer, but revealed in an instant way...anyhow it's good and I liked it...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Surya. Hehe sorry for making it fast for you. I am sometimes a lazy writer. The gu.. read more
Surya

7 Years Ago

Hahaha...:)
Surya

7 Years Ago

Hahaha...:)
This was deffinetly unique I love the plot twist and how you would never guess it till it's revealed in front of you

Posted 7 Years Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much. Oh yes, the guy in here really knows how to hide a secret.
well i can see a murder mystery television show about this

Posted 7 Years Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

Not yet wordman. I am still not good with that hehe.
amazing job man, wow!!!
read it twice without getting in a tone for even a second.
keep up!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Apoorva. The guy is really good at hiding something in his pocket and in his mind... read more
Brilliant, you did really well.
Beautiful write.. more when it took a turn

Posted 7 Years Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Farhan. Yeah. I save the best for last. ;)
Wow, that took a turn. I'd love to see a longer version of this. It'd be amazing. If I were going to critique anything, it would be that you should put a little bit more "the sleepless nights and pain' and the next two lines. I would add a little hint as to why he might have killed her. Like maybe that he felt bad that his last memory was of fighting or something like that. But, your piece is amazing the way it is!

Posted 7 Years Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

That is a nice idea Quinn. I am just lazy sometimes in writing and just wanted the reader to have th.. read more
So, what do we have here. A short piece, literally with a killer twist. This could easily open up into a fully blown book. I could think of quite a number of ways in which to do it...but thats just me. But I get that some people find it hard to turn their pieces into stories. So, what I say to them is build your pieces up, take little steps by little steps by adding in more details, building the suspense and tension, each a little more than the last chapter and then you will find yourself exploring more with words and find yourself getting carried away with your imagination. This piece has a good solid foundation to work from. There are many, many books out there to help you build on this.

Really, really good read and good technique too in regards to keeping a good line until the very last..

Mark.

Posted 7 Years Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

Oh yeah, I would love to make a book about this kind sometime but I would just focus finishing that .. read more
I surely liked...
An unexpected twist.......... who doesn't like?
Try more in the suspense sector......:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

I definitely will Naat. Since you said it. ;)
Oooh, I love the twist ending!
What an interesting piece. I really feel the emotions of the character here, and the loss and pain was so believable it made the ending come as even more of a shock.
Great job

Posted 7 Years Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Sinbulvinter. It is good to know you like it. :)
The idea and the entire plot was amazing. I would have loved it if you actually turned this into a book!!! Really cool plot twist

Posted 7 Years Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much. but I am new to this kind. I am afraid I cannot sustain. :(
pia

7 Years Ago

it never harms to give stuff a try
im new to the whole writing thing as well
CAPOLAVORO

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Pia. I will then. :)

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