LOVELESS

I can't write romantic poems. Period.

No sweet on tongue that taste so strong

I am Loveless in all day long

No bright on eyes that looks for light

I am Loveless right on this sight

No song on lip that it could keep

I am Loveless 'till morning deep

No feel of thrill that works my will

I am Loveless that it could kill

No tears of joy that serves a toy

I am Loveless and it annoys

No caress of bliss when in distress

I am Loveless with just no peace

No breath of warmth when there is storm

I am Loveless in all of form

No sign of hope when I can't cope

I am Loveless with no good scope

No rose of faith when trust comes failed

I am Loveless and that is nailed

No ring of gem that comes from him

I am Loveless than all of them

No sweet

No bright

No song

No feel

No tears

No caress

No breath

No sign

No rose

No ring

I am Loveless is my ending

Author's Note

This is out from a real emotion that I have somewhere in the part of my hypothalamus which I believe is not working right now.

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is a really nice one! I would say being loveless aint half bad 😉 you gotta be free haha
Regarding the style and context, I think you could tweak the words a bit for a better flow.
I liked the photo, it actually enhances the effect of your write.
Good work 👍

[Joey Nizz]

This is an interesting read, I can feel what the character is going through as I read every line, what a remarkable read.

Thank you for sharing.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Joey. Never thought you could feel a broken heart cause you are always inspired. ;) Know what I mean.. hehe

[Joey Nizz]

hehe yeah I got you ;p
Your only human if you can feel every emotion known to man, we're not robots and I feel sorry for the heartless to not feel these feelings, to learn and to be happy.
And sometimes the most inspired ones can be the most broken ones, just saying... :p

[CAPOLAVORO]

figured you'd say that. ;)

[Joey Nizz]

all great minds think a like ;)

[CAPOLAVORO]

I'll accept that as a compliment then. ;)

[Joey Nizz]

Compliments all around then ;p

[Coyote Poetry]

Artwork and words. So amazing. I enjoyed the flow of thoughts leading to realistic ending. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much too for reading cayote. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Poet.

[Hope]

Really dunno what to say.... its just great.
The feeling is awesome.
Brilliant work!

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Neetha for the wonderful review. :)

[Sinbulvinter]

whoa, this is some very raw emotions and extremely powerful. i can relate to the feeling in this.
I like the structure you used, as well as both photos. (The top one, cover photo, is green day! I love Green Day!)
Great work here, very emotionally raw and strong

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Sinbulvinter. :) I like green day also. :)

[Paul Bell]

The concept is brilliant. I would change a few lines though. But the message gets through okay.

[CAPOLAVORO]

I respect your own view Paul. I like how you give your own also. Yours was amazing to read at the same time. :)

[Paul Bell]

Pleasure, your poem was brill.

[Najam Us Saher]

I liked the flow and the rhythm of this poem. I felt like it was another poem within a poem when I read the last stanza. Truly nicely written. I liked it.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Najam. :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome :)

[Jes' Pi]

All I can say is WOW.
And WOW image too....

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. :)

[apennylate]

No I... No, but... No... I swore... I felt the reality of life through this one... Nicely penned...

[CAPOLAVORO]

Yes I... Yes, but... Yes... I swore... I felt you review there. :) Thank you so much Silente.

[apennylate]

You are so welcome, Cap...

[Mr.Writer]

First of all, amazing use of repetition!
I could see those emotions clearly in my head and could feel them as well...
"I am Loveless is my ending"
Wow, what a breathtaking poem...
You can do anything if you use more effort and will power :)
Keep it up!

[CAPOLAVORO]

It is so good to know you like it Mr. Writer. I will surely keep it up. :)

[Mr.Writer]

That's good :)