I PROMISE

The five stages of grief.

Denial covers me

From the deep pain of loss

It provides safe shelter

Like the sign of the cross

 

Anger consumes my soul

Blames myself for his death

God is not merciful

I blame for his last breath

 

Bargaining for God’s chance

Please let my father live

I kneel down to all saints

A good heart I will give

 

Depression slowly comes

Tears for my father run

Aches and pains embrace me

All my desire is done

 

Acceptance is a friend

Wherever you are Pa

I hope you are so proud

I will take care of Ma

 

I PROMISE.

Author's Note

I promise to listen to all of your reviews. :) I miss my father though. Free verse for now.

Reviews

[Caroline]

This is so sad and deep . The feeling of loss runs really deep. Good work

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Sad and beautiful poem. Eloquent words, great rhyme and flow- like tears for your dear father. I am so sorry for your loss. He is still watching over you and is so proud of your writing, I'm sure. Well-done.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much for those words. :) The poem is truly made out of love for my papa.

[Mr.Writer]

Awe... this is so sad Capolavoro...
I loved it though, and it felt very nice and sad to read at the same time...
Amazing, beautiful...

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. Glad you felt the emotion. :)

[Paul Bell]

The whole world fell on you that day. Pain and forgiveness. They always go together. Your dad will be as proud as punch for this tribute.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. It is just so hard sometimes when you want to show him something yet he is not around anymore.

[Paul Bell]

It's amazing how people make themselves present when you least expect them to. A song comes on, a certain film, just a phrase. I do it with my brother a lot. I ask him what he would do in this situation. It helps.

[...]

Very beautiful and sad. Words are gentle even this must be realy hard for you. But you create something realy beautiful and spiritual.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. Glad you felt it. :) Sometimes pain can lead you into making a good piece.

[...]

Yes sometime does. And sometimes wee need more time to find something beautiful in ugly event.

[J Manuel]

A father daughter poem, very special, heart felt and powerful, thank you for sharing such wonderful emotions through words.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much J. I am so glad you felt it. :)

[J Manuel]

Yes, I am a father myself. thanks again for sharing

[Tina H.W.]

I came to return the favour fir your lovely review of my work, Capolavoro, but I didn't expect this! This is so incredibly touching and heartfelt. I felt the pain of loss as I read and the last verse brought tears to my eyes. It really is such a powerfully emotional poem. Loved it :)

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Tina. Your works are absolutely wonderful also. The absent friends, I cannot still get out of my mind. :)

[Tina H.W.]

Aw, thank you :)
This poem is hard to leave my mind too. As soon as I have more time, I'm going to check out more from you :)

[Poeticme]

Very lovely sentiment to your father....Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece of writing.....Oh how I miss my father still

Poeticme

[CAPOLAVORO]

Yes, it is such a good feeling to release everything. You are very much welcome and thank you. :)

[Taz]

This poem is so beautiful with the pain and sorrow of loss love yet recovery of hope as you know he is still able to know and reconize you for what you currantly do. I could feel the sadness and love in this poem, your rhyme scheme was flawless and this piece almost brought me to tears. I am very impressed with your work here, amazing job.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Taz for your kind words. I appreciate this thought coming from someone who is good at emotional poetry also. :)

[Taz]

You are very welcome and thanks for the compliment.

[yuhee]

God this hit me. Had been there. Though it's hard we really need to accept and continue living.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. It is good to know that you can feel my piece. :)