I"VE BEEN HERE, I'VE BEEN THERE

This is about an emotion that I have been through.

Two low set of bridges

Leading to where love ceases

Bite down the curved lake restraint

Circling anger unchain

I've been here

I've been there

'Twas two round village

Precious water crawling down

Dark grass soaked through

Only I know she's feeling blue

I've been here

I've been there

Now the village is in twinkle

Dancing villagers slowly mingle

Down is broadly curved lake

Only I know her gone ache

I've been here

I've been there

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

I also couldn't make out what this poem wanted to convey until I read the comments. A little criticism here, while you are writing a poem only you know all the metaphors and the meaning so you can understand it well in order to make your readers to understand you have to give a hint to the readers or atleast mention the comparision of the words. Apart from this I liked the imagery of the village and the surroundings.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Sooorrryyy.. :) I really though of that before putting this poem up . I just could not help myself but to put it still since I love it. Selfish I know hehe Thank you so much for liking it anyway. :)

[Najam Us Saher]

There is no need of sorry and thanks I can understand that you were in a hurry. I am also like that sometimes. :D

[CAPOLAVORO]

Hehe. Thank you.

[Surya]

Well beautiful words used here to show your emotions regarding eyes i guess,....if that so it's really beautiful or else you can explain me, about your poem...

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you. two low set of bridges is like the two low set of eyebrows which depicts anger and aggression and the "curved lake" would be the lips or the mouth, notice that I used it twice already.

'Twas two round village means two round eyes and the dark grass are eyelashes the water part would be tears this stanza means sadness of the eyes.

The last stanza would mean happiness. The eyes is now happy The dancing villagers in here would be the swaying eyelashes.

All in all,it means I have experienced all of these emotions already and I understand how other people is feeling also. :) Notice that the picture is an eye. It all connects to the eyes of ours.

[Abraham George]

i told you i am not a poet . I didn't understand what these beautiful lines are saying. Could you please teach me?

[CAPOLAVORO]

Okay my good lazy friend Abraham hehe.. two low set of bridges is like the two low set of eyebrows which depicts anger and aggression and the "curved lake" would be the lips or the mouth, notice that I used it twice already.

'Twas two round village means two round eyes and the dark grass are eyelashes the water part would be tears this stanza means sadness of the eyes.

The last stanza would mean happiness. The eyes is now happy The dancing villagers in here would be the swaying eyelashes.

All in all,it means I have experienced all of these emotions already and I understand how other people is feeling also. :) Notice that the picture is an eye. It all connects to the eyes of ours.

[Abraham George]

OMG! For understanding this i should be a genius and a poet. i am not the both. i am just a normal man . While reading your explanation my curved lake become round(oh!)

[Abraham George]

And this is not a poem

[CAPOLAVORO]

What is it to you then? :)

[Abraham George]

Its an ART

[Abraham George]

You have drawn it.

[Abraham George]

picturized

[CAPOLAVORO]

Oh stop it Abraham or I'll make a poem about you hehe.

[Abraham George]

really?
I am waiting to read about me

[Abraham George]

Please make a poem about me. Like all you poem let me be a beautiful one

[Abraham George]

Will you make a poem faster? i am eager to read it.

[CAPOLAVORO]

haha wait I am thinking give me two hours for that maybe.