YOU'RE A POET NOT A LOVER

There are just some men who are just good in words and not in works. Y'all guys who are like this, here is something for you.

You're a poet not a lover

You told me that I am the source of your power

discover, uncover, clever, bluffer

In the end you made me suffer

You're a poet not a partner

You told me about roses and flowers

Comparing me to petals

But what did I get?

Not even a chocolate

How pathetic

You're a poet not a swain

You say about getting stars

Spending hours on a train

A love to shower

In the end I got pain

You're a poet stick to it

Don't forego with love and be heroic

If you do

Be sure the words you use you'll prove it

Or else heaven and earth for love will move it.

Author's Note

Ignore grammar problems just have fun. :)

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'YOUR A POET NOT A LOVER'
CAPOLAVARO,
How well does anyone really know another? What rules a soul in the deepest places? Presenting feelings, thoughts in word form will bring out the hidden. I wondered about the subject of your writing being someone which is presenting a person he is but is afraid to step out in the light. I hope, if this was a real relationship it has improved or you are happy now with a new love. I would like to hear a poem where you are truly finding joy in this area!
Blessings,
Kathy

[Hi]

Shoot. You're giving away all the secrets. Now I have to burn about half my poems and stock up on chocolate.

There is certainly a happy balance here I think, but one thing is clear. Don't give another poem about chocolate without the chocolate.

[emipoemi]

So long as you're aware that there are grammar problems, that saves me the trouble of pointing out the number of them. This poem, apart from that aspect, is brilliantly crafted, and well structured. Stanza 1 Line 2 is a bit wordy for the musicality and Line 3 is a bit confusing as to how it's connected to the stanza in what it's trying to say, but I quite enjoyed this! It's funny in its wit, but also sad in the other side of the story and therefore profound in its message. With a good polishing, it could genuinely be a poetic gem. Well done!

[Wajiha Nayeem]

this is lovely...i loved it..

[L.C. Jarrette]

haha! i definitely enjoyed it. this is good.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. :)

[William Liston]

I had a laugh reading this, primarily because I fit into this category, though I haven't written a love poem in a while.
Though this piece is mostly satirical, it's profound in a way. Sometimes our thoughts can never go beyond mere words.

- William Liston

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much for having a time to read this one. :)

[apennylate]

Hah... I enjoyed the quick rhyme switches, and it is deeply lined with backwards emotion... From roses to petals, and pathetic driveling of chocolate covered lips... Heroically penned...

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Silente. It is so good to hear a review like this from you. :)

[Nicholas Shea]

It's amazing to me how many artists/writers/musicians are so in love with the idea love.. yet that's as deep as it gets.. They live in a daydream world, and cause the subject of their "affections" to suffer because they can't let go of that daydream.

[CAPOLAVORO]

I really get you. There are just some people who detached themselves to reality not knowing someone is left behind.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Interesting indeed. A poet is probably a man of words and not of action ;)
This was humorous for me to read. Good work :)

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much for the appreciation. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome :)

[mercy party]

Word of the day is "bluffer", i like how it was used. This was a very cool and fun approach to something typical. Don't buy what the poet is selling for a second. Good work, great poem.

[mercy party]

..i also wanted to add that you came up with an epic and memorable title here.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much MP. I am glad that you had fun out from this piece. :)