TREAT ME LIKE AN ELEMENT

It is for you to find out. Play with your mind. Do not be an easy thinker.

Treat me like the Earth

Keep stepping on my worth

Dig into my own wealth

Plant poisons do it stealth

Treat me like the Water

Satisfy your body in my honor

Quench the thirst of your desire

When your satisfied call me Sire

Treat me like the Fire

In my presence you shall admire

It's okay to be a liar

Play with me outside the wire

Treat me like the Air

After the heat the breeze will share

Breathing bodies in despair

Winds of love can now prepare

Treat me like the Ether

Sweet smelling reliever

Bloodless way of leisure

A liquid that can still put us in danger. 

Author's Note

Still playing with words. Hoping for reviews maybe. I am still new at this one.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

CAPOLAVORO,
'Treat me like an element' is such a inner fire of anguish. It screams in subtle ways of the earths parts and breaks the personal attributes of the soul's beauty. The soul is the basic building block of a person and should be treated as something sacred just so the God created earth. I like how you brought about such a clever piece of work and force the reader's mind to think about the earth and it's inhabitant's as a whole and also how people can be cavalier about people and about this earth as well. I really found this line powerful.."treat me like the fire. In my presence you shall admire. It's ok to be a liar. Play with me outside the wire." and "Dig into my own wealth...........I actually started wanting to write more down as this is really heartfelt and has a lot of meaning.......This was satisfying to read and think about............Thankyou.........Kathy

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Kathy. God's creations are really worthy to tackle about. They are pure evidence of His wonderful existence. I believe that we ought to talk more and dig deeper about social issues and environmental concerns. :) I am very glad you like it.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Nice to hear back. I wish you every growth of creativity and joy in your life! Of course I know that as you do The Lord Jesus is right in it with you and loves you more than you know!............Kathy

[James Keller]

What a remarkable piece. Very powerful and inspiring. You should put this on a poster, it would sell well

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much James. :)

[Mr.Writer]

Beautiful! Soo creative! Keep it up! :)

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. :)

[mercy party]

i like how this covers the four basic elements, but the fifth element is ether. Ether could refer to the spirit itself, but the way you word the last verse i feel you are referring to spirits as in alcohol. Either way is has a nice twist. good job!

[CAPOLAVORO]

Oh that is more than that. :) anyways, Thank you so much. You have the freedom to think and feel what you like through my poem I would just like to awaken something from the reader's mind that has long been sleeping. ;)

[The Exiled Wolf]

The creativity here is stunning. Rhyming is almost perfect, and the connection between the elements and the emotions are clear. This is indeed a nicely crafted piece!

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much exiled wolf. :)

[Gee]

At first I thought it said elephant so I very nearly threw you a bun.....

[CAPOLAVORO]

hahaha okay that was a good one. Yeah, sometimes I get into that situation also where I misread some of the titles. Crazy but humanly true. ;)

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Nice methaporhs . I can relate to this completly. Words are wonderfuly foating together.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. Glad you were able to relate to it.

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Yes . this idea is wonderful

[LKBillips]

I like the idea of this. The elements are always fun to play with and you've giving me some ideas to work with. Thanks for the inspiration. :)

[CAPOLAVORO]

You are very much welcome.I am so glad to inspire you to be creative using the elements. :)

[duff]

A clever piece of writing. An entertaining read that's well crafted. Great job

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. :)

[duff]

Anytime and you're welcome!

[emmajoy]

Such an intelligent post, full of likenesses between distinguished and natural elements and what one hopes are natural human beings.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. :)