TREAT ME LIKE AN ELEMENT

It is for you to find out. Play with your mind. Do not be an easy thinker.

Treat me like the Earth

Keep stepping on my worth

Dig into my own wealth

Plant poisons do it stealth

Treat me like the Water

Satisfy your body in my honor

Quench the thirst of your desire

When your satisfied call me Sire

Treat me like the Fire

In my presence you shall admire

It's okay to be a liar

Play with me outside the wire

Treat me like the Air

After the heat the breeze will share

Breathing bodies in despair

Winds of love can now prepare

Treat me like the Ether

Sweet smelling reliever

Bloodless way of leisure

A liquid that can still put us in danger. 

Author's Note

Still playing with words. Hoping for reviews maybe. I am still new at this one.

Reviews

[Miss Sharon]

I love this write! Treat me like the earth, the water, the fire, the air and the Ether...fabulous imagery in this. ~Sharon

[the one inside]

Treat me like Thunder
Bristle bright through my soul
which once sparked under
The gallant lighting roll

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Hey I like this piece. thanks for sharing your nice talent.

[wordman]

well you are playing with words very well,loved this one,,and the ending left open for another time

[Courtney]

I love this. You are a wonderful writer

[Esa Ray]

Simply creative, and you're still new at this one? Amazing! You're really an artist. :) I love the concept and the title, too. So catchy. Keep writing!

[alanwgraham]

A great idea using the 5 elements. It seems that you have chosen to write a poem with rhyme and metre (number of beats). The rhymes work but the metre is not quite right. Working to a rigid formula is tough but you have to keep the sense. For example your first verse might be better with, 'dig into my wealth'
It's worth working on.
Alan

[ms. barrie]

please forgive me for my delayed visit *s* upon your
ink. i'm glad i have finally come across this gem!

all i can say is that this is truly a mesmerizing write...i adore your unique, captivating take upon creating humanistic characteristics, upon the otherwise ethereal, elusive "elements"

beautifully penned with elegance & passion. enjoy the lyrical fluidity as well.

thank you so much for sharing
-xx-

[andrew mitchell]

ether can be bad for your health lol, i liked the elements scenario of treat me like an element and this is what you get. an interesting read.

[Paul Bell]

Like the wrath feel to this poem. Maybe scope for harsher lines. Though that might be me.
Treat me like death.
Strip me bare.
Without a care.
Treat me.