Desert Rose

This is raw, and unfinished....I was just getting some thoughts down....................

The mirror isn't kind at all

Wrinkles embedded on my face

Like the weathered desert floor

Each crevice and line

Tell a story and reflect the scars,

of love and life's journey  written  on my heart

The new lives from infancy raised

Losses of beloveds long in their graves

Life's winds and storms are all etched

on this old desert rose

Along with lovers remembered and baby's faces

And moments I never want to forget

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[BLACKCRUSH]

I think this poem is perfect the way it is. I believe with age comes a greater self confidence which is very beautiful. Are body's are just our outer shell and are not meant to last forever. " Along with lovers remembered and baby's faces and moments I never want to forget" I love that piece in your poem it really touched me. Great poem

[THERISA]

This poem reflects the spirit of life, in all of its glory. Changing it, would ruin the message that it conveys to the reader. Thank you, for sharing this very personal poem with us.

[James Paulin]

I think this poem has a great theme well worth refining. I would try to make it into a sonnet and then let it be what it wants to be. This one is a gem. Thank you for my review.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. I could really feel this one.. probably because I am starting to feel it too.. being 37 (although I sometimes still feel 25).. this flows like the thought of time passing.. it's like waking up and realizing that suddenly you are getting older and really feeling it too.. through the losses and struggles.. reminising over memories of those who have passed through our lives.. I think alot of people will relate to this one.. as time sure passes quickly!!! I plan to make the rest of my time the best!!! Thank you for sharing!!! =)