Lonely Refugee

On the run from my homeland

 and everything familiar to me

Beatings, rapes, and murder

Watching as  children die slowly of starvation

Diseases easily cured

Overcrowded conditions on the edge of nowhere

Waiting for someone to speak

How do they set in silence

And justify their omissions?

The world has abandoned us

The lonely refugee

And my homeland that once was mine

A nightmare has become

My brothers and sisters lay dying

Not strong enough for a fight

What is it exactly people stand for

if not for us?

 

 

 

Reviews

[Julio Angel Ortiz]

I like the idea here, but I feel it needs more. Don't know what it is; the sentiment is there but the imagery is too basic; it doesn't take enough chances like I've seen in your other poetry. It's like a high-level view of the problem but a ground-level one would work better. I don't know if that makes sense.

Also, is "How do they set in silence" supposed to be "How do they *sit* in silence"?

I'd love to see another draft of this!

[chocolate_addict]

Very spirited. The last line was very touching and thought provoking.

[E-man]

wow the point is strong and you've written this perfectly im glad people are able to not only expose these problems but do it in such a great write i wish i could do the same kudos to you

[James Paulin]

Prose poetry is the style best suited for your stories of injustice and needed compassion. I like your choice of words but I would experiment with form. You have important themes and talent. Thank you for the compliments on my poem!

[Exa Lectric]

I think this poem has a really good message. Why should people stand by when so many others are abused pr under nourished? Not everyone has things as easy as one would think. great write! can't wait to read another!