Life's Wonders

 

 

I've stood on a river that flows through

An island made of Volcanic lava and ash

Watching the salmon in an unspoiled spot

Stood on mountains I could almost touch heaven and

Where every blade of grass and flower was in it's place

I've watched the ocean waves when they were quiet

And when they were loud with no one to hear

I've landed between snow capped mountains

Felt the earth bolt and rumble under my feet

And traveled further south to witness

Ancient ruins and walked on some still uncovered

I've danced in the pristine blue water where

I could look down and see fish brightly colored

Took cover  while wild winds moved the foundation

And blew up houses and old trees around me

But withstanding all this my biggest thrill has been

The honor of being your mother.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[J.P.]

Honestly,
everything was ordinary except for the last one, of which together with the usage of repetition created a really terrific impact on the reader. ( if you're familiar with Classical Music, it's similar to Joseph Hayden's "Surprise" Symphony except it's on the silent paper) Anyways, everything before last line was "normal" then you banged the reader's head with that last touching and surprise line; the normality and "boredom" beforehand actually enhanced the impact of the last line.

Terrific Piece

[Bud]

Beautiful. That last line brings an unexpected tear. Good job.

[Joe]

This was a pretty poem. The last line was powerful, due to the crescendo you created in this poem. Good job!

[Missy Jane]

I really like this poem. I'm a mom and can comletely "get" this. It flows well and has wonderful imagery, but the last two lines are superb.

[Jewels]

You can tell through your writing how genuine of a person you are, its beautiful, really.

[Anita B Jacques]

Hi, so moving is your poem, tha last line took me by surprise, and made it complete. Strong emotions in that awsome Poem, thank you for sharing. God bless.

Anita

[3leafmama]

motherhood is by far the most beautiful adventure. i enjoyed how this piece carried me through physical spaces only to come to a place that can only be found in one's heart.

[Wondering Mind]

Sweet! Such is the purity of a mother's love.

[FORBIDDEN DESTINY]

That is an incredible.... piece as a mother... it was a wave of emotions that we feel for our gifts... our children.

[scotty]

Interesting I like it, I would keep the writing up.