You Rotten B*****d

 

 

Your soul is ugly

And so are you

Your inner child

don't even like you!

You've given me nightmares

And won't leave my head

I'm sick of floundering  in my bed

My power is  taken back into my hands

And I'm running you off

You can't be in my head!

 

 

Reviews

[Phibby Venable]

huge message here! and i adore the lines about the inner child.
wonderful work.

[~Sweet Mel~]

Great work,short but to the point!I loved it!

[Raef C. Boylan]

Ouch.
Nice work conveying straight-talking anger.
Is this somebody elses' viewpoint or your own? In the fourth line, "don't" should be "doesn't" if the poem's meant to be grammatically correct, unless it was a deliberate way to reveal your narrator's character?

Good piece.

[Sheila Kline]

Yep, get it out!
Sometimes we have to unleash pent up anger by just letting it spew out! Sounds like somebody deserved it!
Get it of your head already!!!
Sheila

[Liza]

such passion - i can totally relate to the poem!

get that b*****d out of the head :)

Enjoyed it :)

[cigale]

I like this. Concise, and straight to the point. You said a lot in only a few lines!

I can certainly relate to being angry enough to take my power back.

Keep em' coming!

[Vague]

Very concise, and a lot of energy conveyed.

I'm sure many people felt their blood boil a little reading this, which is excellent.

[Anita B Jacques]

Good for you. Right to the point. No wasted words. A great write. Thank you for sharing.

[BodilessSoul]

Love this poem. Short, to the point, and full of attitude. I love the punch you give with just those few lines. I can absolutely relate to this poem.

[Wondering Mind]

This certainly is a punch of a poem.