Tired of Your Depression

Depressions mark on loved ones!

 

 

My frustration and anger grows

When you spiral down, down

Into your black abyss

Following you there

In utter despair

Extending my hand to bring you out

I land right there on top of you

Somehow, I find my way up, up

Out of that loathesome, lonely, dark nothingness

You stay there shrouded in pain

Warming to your misery like a cloak

Your emotional treachery, and black, dark moods

Making stains on those that care

Next time you go down that hole

I won't follow you there

 

 

Reviews

[Danielle Searby]

I have suffered with depression for years and am very aware that is the epitome of selfishness. It isn't just the affect that it has on the person suffering but everyone around them. I'm glad to see a poem written from the perspective of a loved one. It is hard for everyone involved and I can understand the pain involved in helping them.

[Fidheallir]

You have expressed the wearing effect of that experience very well. However, you might want to change some of the clich� metaphors (dark mood-- way overused). You have some great imagery in the poem (misery like a cloak, making stains), and it will be more effective if it isn't lost under extra words.

[Scrawlid]

I would have to agree with the perspective.
Though, having been on both sides, it's emotionally painful all around.
Awesome job.

[Vague]

You very aptly expressed how I happen to feel when I hit a patch of depression.

Like a loathsome and tired diseased disease. (nah, that's not a typo)

[Rain]

Great write. It's very profound in so many ways. Depression is a cancer that effects everyone. The person who is depressed know that, and it makes it worse. But, the effect on others is so real. You did an excellent piece on a difficult subject. Rain..

[Zach]

Nice one. I'm one of those functionally depressed people. Teetering on the edge because I know it effects others to see someone in that state. Love the way you put it.

[Emmie]

Nice write! =) Depression doesn't just hurt the person expriencing it, but everyone around them. It's hard to grasp that concept for most, but this has simplified all meaning... however, I feel this poem has deep, true, emotion in itself.

[ape domenigoni]

Wow this one is terrific! I'm usually the one going down the hole, never thought of it from someone else's perspective. Very good!