WITHOUT A DOUBT

Written about 3 y/o grandbaby with ATRT cancer. She is truly an "old" spirit!

 

 

 

Your little spirit has been undaunted

By this hideous ugly disease

Through chemo, radiation, and things children shouldn't see

With a peace, and a presence that none of us understand

While the rest of us have been haunted, and frozen in fear

Praying endlessly and relentlessly for a cure

........"Only a 10% survival rate".....  resonates through our minds

Yet you are here these many months later

Thriving, playing and growing like you will live forever

 

Happy and filled with laughter like all newly 3 year olds

Your soul must be connected to an invisible thread

That gives you unquestionable faith

While we all live in dread

You KNOW what it's all about and have a devine acceptance

and grace, and peace that the adults don't know about!

Your ancient spirit WILL survive and go on forever

And YOU have no doubt

While the rest of us have forgotten,  and pray and cry and shout

haunted, and frozen in fear

While you little one have no doubt

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Creepy Swine Guy]

Reviewer Disclaimer:

First off, I am no expert. What I offer here is nothing more than my opinions. I'm no expert, in fact I don't even think that I ever even got an "A" in an English class. But I'll tell you what I liked and what I thought seemed a little off. I'm not trying to make myself feel important (I hate when people do that) I'm just telling you what I think. That being said, I'll go ahead and review:

In the line:
"........"Only a 10% survival rate"..... resonates through our brain"

"our brain" seems odd. "Our" is a plural term and "brain" is singular. "our minds" would feel better to my ear.
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In the line:
"You KNOW what it's all about and have a devine exceptance"

I think that "exceptance" should be "acceptance"
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Now to the good stuff. You have zeroed in on and captured something important. Something that babies and old people seem to know. They are able to live in "this minute" they do not dwell on the past and seem not to worry about tomorrow, knowing instinctively that if they do, they will lose "this minute". I especially enjoyed these lines:

"Yet you are here these many months later
Thriving, playing and growing like you will live forever"

That is the essence that is the core of this wonderful tribute to that peaceful soul. You've done wonderful work here. You have stirred my mind and my muse and I feel blessed to have read this

[Die Swan]

I have a child of my own, so this poem really speaks to me. I like it. I can look past the few grammar errors, because it's the FEELING and EMOTION that really matters. And you got it down pat.

[Legion]

It is through the eyes of the innocent that life is truly understood to be enjoyed and lived (short as it could be). This is a tragic write in one sense, but a wonderful write in another. Kudos on something well done.

[Sophie]

Oh my God, this almost brought tears to my eyes.
Just knowing that this poem is true, and there is a three year old girl, battling cancer out there makes me want to break down and cry. I just want to let you know that she is in my prayers.
Also, I loved the way you say that she has an 'old spirit'. I know many young children with spirits vastly more mature and wise than they should be.
Great poem. I really liked it.

[C. Porter]

this is good, and expresses a lot of emotion.

[Essie]

This poem is beautiful, moving, and inspirational. It really presents the impact that cancer has on an entire family and that hope remains an extremely important quality to possess throughout difficult times. I hope that everything turns out well for you and your family.
-Jessica.

[Valentine]

Honey..sometimes all it takes is a child's faith to be spoken and it does happen..I had 10 + years of violent seizures..My niece came down with her grand mom and layed hands on me and prayed..I have been seizure free ever since..praise God and thank the faith of a child who does not DOUBT!! sad but powerful write..I will be praying for her and have all of my prayer warriers do the same..God bless..Valentine

[Lena M. P.]

I felt the desperation of a family facing a child's cancer. Working in a children's hospital I see it everyday. I want to tell you why I have stayed here for so many years. I had just started working and not thinking I could do it. Seeing this kids eveyday was taking its toll on my heart. One day I saw two preteens in wheelchairs racing to the gift shop with their bandannas covering their bald heads, popping wheelies as they raced. "Last one there buys the candy bars." I realized then that if they could stay so positive when they had every reason not to, then so could I. There are none as strong as the children. This poem was just an extension of your pain and that is good to write it down. Just never loose the faith.

[Markymark]

I like it. SO much of your stuff goes straight to the heart. Keep plugging.

[Ellen Hammond]

This evokes so many emotions. Probably, many will think or say that this small child is simply too young to really grasp the situation. But, I like to think that perhaps it is the opposite, that this babe has not been tainted by the world of mankind's sense of reality, fear, and doubt. That her/his spirit still remembers the loving home it left to be born so there is no fear at the thought of returning from whence it came.

My heart goes out to you and your family as you go through this tremendous trial. This poem certainly does move me.