True Embrace

I don't know...I think it needs work...(What are you really supposed to write in the description....0_0)

Think of all the pain
That is shared in this life
As the butterfly of the heart
Takes it's last breath
We say good bye,
As the winter's breath,
Falls on the world
Every silver tear
That falls freely
Frozen in place.
Only to feel the summer breezes
Once again
Walk along with me in this secret garden
Of hope and dreams
I find peace
In your embrace
When the fireflies dance to the wind
And your soft kisses
Fill me with insanity
Just stay with me
In this true embrace.

Reviews

[Amanda]

nicely written. the seasons being compared to the 'phases' of love is great....i like that you ended with the true embrace.

don't sweat the descriptions, hon....if you don't have one, don't put one, ok?

keep up the great work!

Amanda =)))

[Illegitimate Artist]

LOVE your descriptions!!! They're so visual. "And your soft kisses Fill me with insanity" what a great line! It makes me want to go upstairs and hug my woman even though she's asleep and probably wouldn't appreciate it ;p

[Reuben Porter]

A very nice poem indeed, I really enjoyed reading this as I did the other poem you submitted. You are a very talented writer.

As for the description, just tell a little about the poem, like how you came to write it, what it means to you, what you think of it, etc. Letting people know what you think of your own work is a good way for people to learn how confident you are in your works, which lets them get to know you easier.