Clarity...

A moment in thought, a lifetime of change.

There was a girl who cared for all except herself

Others always came first, her life left on the shelf

It sat there collecting dust; it was too hard to look

And too difficult to open, that cold and dusty book

She spent her days helping whoever was in need

She hoped through sacrifice, she would no longer bleed

To fight for right and justice, she had something to prove

Dedicated and determined, there was nothing left to lose

To free her of the past and the dark demons it hides

To free her of relapsing trauma that ensues down inside

Set free from yesterdays, the hurt and pain it brought

Though many she had helped, she still remained distraught

Truth was, she was broken, trapped inside the dark

Forsaken by those who left destructive marks

The sanguine sun rose up, dawning a new conception

A renewed sense of self, divine appreciation

Grateful for the struggles, for all the pain and tears

No sun without the rain, just wasted youth-filled years

For through the haze and fumble, she found love and empathy

Circumambient fog dissipates, now she can clearly see

It made her who she is; it formed her innate nature,

Breaching the genetic code that tried to restrict her

A lifetime of burden, now a lifetime of creation

And she will keep creating, until her final destination

 

Author's Note

Would love feedback so that I can learn and improve, all comments welcome :)

Reviews

[Lisa Victoria]

I love the rhythm in this poem, it flowed so effortlessly like a song, and the imagery behind your story was so vivid...I love the lines" The sanguine sun rose up, dawning a new conception"
"A new sense of self, divine appreciation" beautifully penned, you are very talented:) Thanks for sharing...

Lisa

[Broken Wings]

Thank you so much for your time and review :) That is so nice of you to say, I truly appreciate it.

[Lisa Victoria]

You're very welcome:)

[Coyote Poetry]

"Grateful for the struggles, for all the pain and tears
No sun without the rain, just wasted youth-filled years"
I enjoyed the story in the poem. The above lines were my favorite. There is logic and wisdom in your words. A lifetime of burden does teach us we are worthwhile and needed till the end. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Tom]

This poem combines an intriguing, uplifting story ( The sanguine sun rose up, dawning a new conception ) that so encapsulates the reader's imagination with its vivid, descriptive poetic lines, ( Circumambient fog dissipates, now she can clearly see ) another example.

A marvelous poem, I enjoyed it immensely, well penned !

[Broken Wings]

Thank you so much Tom, I really appreciate your review and I'm glad you liked this one and that it was up-lifting, that was what I was going for :)

[Ranjita Ghosh Dasgupta]

it was a wonderful read..was it u, u had written about? it was very well written even if it was an imaginary protagonist.

[Broken Wings]

Yes this one is about me, did it resonate with you my friend? Thank you for your kind comments I am glad you liked it :)

[Ranjita Ghosh Dasgupta]

Absolutely ..sometimes it really hurts when u kind of sacrifice or compromise ur wants and yet all of it goes unnoticed ..but i liked the last two lines wherein you hv tried to stay positive n determined

[Broken Wings]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it and sorry you can relate, although I think most with good souls can.

[Akshay]

It made her who she is; it formed her innate nature,
Breaching the genetic code that tried to restrict her

These are the best lines I have read all day. Thank you so much for sharing this beautiful piece.

[Broken Wings]

Wow, that is a humbling review, thank you so much! I'm glad that you like it.

[sanya]

it is mind blowing love it

[Broken Wings]

thank you!

[DJ]

I like the words you use in this one. I can see your skills growing with each new write. This has a nice flow, I think its much better as a read aloud piece, you can almost sing it. The imagery used is nice, I like the reference to the book as her life, collecting dust as she focuses on everything else but herself. I also like the optimism at the end, the 'ah' moment in life when something clicks and you come to a realization is just so freeing and beautiful. Really enjoyed this, I think you are trying new things and I see you developing well, keep writing and learning and branching out my friend. The more you try new things, the more you will learn too.