Tattered Wings

With tattered wings, weakened by the fall

She lay in a heap behind the red brick wall

Still, as the wind dragged against her fragile frame

And the slow, lazy river called out her name

Pieces of her ravaged and taken

Leaving her barely breathing and shaken

In pain slowly she opened one eye

She saw the vultures circling the sky

Picking at her weaknesses taking all the good

Leaving her skeletal, bark stripped off solid wood

She gave her life so others could survive

One last breath as through the sky they dive

Tearing off fragments as she lay quiet and bare

No one ever noticing she exists there

Until they need a dose of magic, a touch of life

As she is the healer of all pain and strife

Woven wings worn until clear as can be

Fragile wings unravelling causing transparency

Breath awfully shallow, taking on too much pain

Weight of the world pulsates through her darkened veins

Eyes slowly close as the leaves glow a golden green

A bright light pierced the dark, a sight to be seen

Tattered wings will fly again as she rose in the light

She now takes all the pain away from her place in the sky

Author's Note

Just a 5 minute piece, to be honest I'm not sure what this is hahaha comments welcome.

Reviews

[S. Overstreet]

I must tell you, it make not have been your intention, but this poem signifies what it's like to be a sacrifice for others and never being replenished.
This stanza:

"Tearing off fragments as she lay quiet and bare
No one ever noticing she exists there
Until they need a dose of magic, a touch of life
As she is the healer of all pain and strife"

really hit my heart because I have always felt that people take from me, leave me to re-cooperate without ever noticing how weak I become from their leeching and then "love" you again when they need something else.

Thank you for sharing, this poem is puts in imagery what I have felt most of my life.

[Broken Wings]

Yes! You totally got what I was meaning to say! I know I wrote it quite general so it can be interpreted a number of ways but you got it! I am so sorry that you can relate to this, it is such a drain on your life and causes emotional pain to the one who helps but never gets helped. Some people come into your life as lessons, I learnt the hard way that I needed to be more firm with people and set boundaries. Also if someone doesn't improve my life e.g. bring in happiness or a reciprocated friendship/relationship then they don't deserve me. But I am seen as a doormat because I am quiet, shy and have emotional wounds that make me vulnerable. I hope you get replenished and are surrounded by people who bring you joy, healing and self-growth :) All the best hun.

[Riding the Rainbow]

Beautiful words that made me feel everything.

[silently leathel]

this was very good, i liked it man. well done :))

[Broken Wings]

Thank you so much Lacy :)

[silently leathel]

no problem

[Hana Saemon]

this is really good! love the imagery! well penned!

[Broken Wings]

Thank you so much :)

[Vani Jalagar]

So cute! Adorable!
"Breath awfully shallow, taking on too much pain
Weight of the world pulsates through her darkened veins"

[Broken Wings]

Aww thank you Vani :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Hello, dear Broken Wings.. My take on this is that of a Guardian Angel, always there to protect and serve those it watches over. This would seem like thankless work, but the humans it is guarding have no knowledge that it is there unless it makes itself known to them. Which probably is not often. So I can imagine all this fighting evil would leave this poor angel pretty tattered and worn.

I did notice that your verb tenses switch back and forth from present to past and vice versa. So you may want to carefully read this and decide if you want it told in present or past.

Wonderful poem.. beautiful imagery.. a pleasure to read!

[Broken Wings]

Hey Lori! What a beautiful interpretation of my poem, a sad yet heart warming thought, to think there could be a guardian angel out there looking after us and taking the pain of the world. I like it. Oh okay, thanks for bringing that to my attention hun, I'll read over it and make some changes. Thanks hun, for your advice and taking the time to read. I hope your well, take care my friend :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

You are most welcome hun.. I am enjoying your work.

[Broken Wings]

Thank you! :) So nice to know.

[DJ]

I think it's good for a rant. It reads to me to be quite deep with an underline meaning, some kind of message that can be read into this. For example my first thought while reading this, is that the person/creature is so selfless they give everything they have to take away another's pain and suffering. Kind of like Mother Teresa or anyone in the caring profession, people like that. Ones who give parts of themselves away just so others don't have to suffer anymore. I like these lines the best:

"Woven wings worn until clear as can be
Fragile wings unravelling causing transparency
Breath awfully shallow, taking on too much pain
Weight of the world pulsates through her darkened veins"

I think this stanza provides the reader with a really good image of what you are writing about. I quite enjoyed this piece. I found it interesting and now I am sitting here thinking of all the ways I can interpret it. Thanks :)

[Broken Wings]

Thanks Cairo, glad you liked it. Yeah your interpretation is pretty right. Thanks for the nice review.