Disturbia

My sleepless nights.

Shivering spine tingles with fright

Knock, knocking on my chamber door.

The dance of fright and be afraid

Shadows waltz upon the walls.

 

Insanity rages in serpeant's delight

Abducted by the fear of glowing eyes

Chains and burning needles

Stinging claws that scratch against skin.

 

The jackyll's hysterical laughter,

Echoes through my mind as I try hard

To return to some sense of reality

A calming dreamland that awaits me.

 

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the description of trying to find sleep. I like the description of wild thoughts and places.
"The dance of fright and be afraid
Shadows waltz upon the walls."
Good to find sleep. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[patricia]

a tortured deeply moving poem wrapped in amazing imagery. enjoyed.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

amazing, great flow both of the words and the thoughts, dark as always but that's normal with this theme xD
I can relate to it, your poem is almost pituresque on showing the thoughts and the "feelings" that comes before sleeping :)

[Monica]

Powerful and imaginative. Great Write! Your imagery is absolutely wonderful!

Shivering spine tingles with fright
Knock, knocking on my chamber door.
The dance of fright and be afraid
Shadows waltz upon the walls.

...Brilliant :)

[rivers]

Nice job, an evolution of anxiety into peace.

"To return to some sense of reality
A calming dreamland that awaits me"...I'm glad your here....

[Diwakar - "The Warrior ..]

brilliant imagery ....... very wild thoughts...liked it :-)

[Ink Angel]

This is scary, the imagery is rilliant, Insanity rages in serpeants delight, love this
very ell writtern. Welldone.

[zero binty]

Ten lines of fear sealed by two lines of comfort. Very good. I like it.

[Lily Mae]

Those places where nightmares dwell.. You did an excellent job describing it the darkness and fright..xo

[Aly Jones]

Powerful and a smooth read.

[Kiari Sabon]

it was sad but very lovely keep up the work