In The Shadows

My 1st Haiku ever written.

 

Glowing evil eyes linger

Every twist and turn they stare

Feeding on fear of human kind.

Author's Note

My first attempt at a Haiku. Be gentle, but I can take the criticism.


Robbie is a haiku inspiration. :)

Reviews

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Sinister...but it was good...

[KAREN]

I thought it was well written. Dark and kinda creepy!

[Muse]

be gentle..lol. How can anybody say anything bad about your work? You are a wonderful writer. In all honesty, I prefer your poetry and prose. But this is good...and you will only get better over time if you continue practicing the art of haiku. Freat job on a first try my dear.

Muse

[just is]

Wow, very creative and wonderful write, enjoyed muchly ; )

[Becky Clancy]

I love it (:

[Dayran]

It may seek the dreamer and have him dream a nobler dream. Nice!

[tk]

ooh. that's something terrifying..but in a good way. :) you know, that feeling when you anticipate something that's horrifying. something like that.
well, for your first attempt, this is surely impressive. :) very mysterious and dark.
wonderfully crafted! :D

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice artwork and words. Create fear and mystery. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Rosallia]

Oooh I like this! It's a very nice haiku, especially for a first attempt. Nice job =)

[Jed Sabffle]

Nicely done for your first time!
I wish it can be longer...
however, this is great and I like the picture in this haiku
Good piece! Keep writing! :)