Neverland

A faraway land,

Hollow forests of enchantment

Chance the opportunity of a lifetime

To leave the darkness far behind you.

 

Everyday a feeling of spring,

Be born a new with accomplishment

To bask in the mist of joys,

And get lost in the forever young.

 

Imaginations soar eternal universes

Glistening in the sunlight of echoeing falls

Of blue velvet glass,

Washing away all broken memories of time.

 

 

Author's Note

I've been working on this for 3 days and every time I've attempted to make it longer it didnt work.

Reviews

[tk]

wow. i imagine being in that enchanting place.. :) lovely piece of art.. :) loved the imagery of this one!! ^_^

[The They]

[~ Stefanie ~]

I think it is great the way you have it. Short and sweet can be better than long and drawn out. You expressed what you needed to in this piece and I think you did a wonderful job with it. :)

[Secret Lullaby]

its realy good :)

[paradise]

Its fine i like how its short I love the whole idea of never land a plce wher dreams come true and you dont have any problems or darkness to deal with the only question is where is my neverland. Loved it

[J. J. Nightingale]

SOUNDS LIKE A ESCAPE FANTASY ... WE ALL WISH WE COULD JUST WASH AWAY ALL BROKEN MEMORIES .. BUT SADLY, LIFE DOESN'T WORK THAT WAY ...

INTERESTING ... TAKE CARE ... J.

[Coyote Poetry]

To be young and free would be a great feeling. I feel it is important to allow the children to have fun and have dreams. Age can take the dream of Neverland and great dreams away. Need to hold on to dreams and our imagination. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I love it exactly the way it is... you are back, girl! This is the style I've come to love reading from you. The last stanza is just gorgeous! I love the dreamlike imagery of your work, as always... Great write!
oppurtunity -"opportunity"

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sounds like a very enchanting place... I agree it doesn't need to be longer, you gave enough imagery to allow the reader to use their imagination.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Sounds good the way it is to me....