Underneath

Words sting the heart

Like the bullet of a gun

A game, a war

Raging within yourself.

 

On the front lines

Underneath all emotion

Eternally, internally

For all humanity to face.

 

A burning sensation

Of decency and civility

The creation of destruction

Spit out your venom.

Author's Note

This popped into my head this morning. What do you think? Whats in your head after reading this?

Reviews

[Revery]

There may be some specific memory or feeling that brought words to you but they speak widely and clearly of the destructiveness and power of words. Your poem seems to talk about words and struggles in your own head but whether realized or not they may be echoes from someone else’s cruelty. I didn't have a childhood as bad as some but I was abused with words that I am still unconsciously trying to disprove.

Isn't it funny how we adopt, embrace and hang onto things said in cruelty and how self punishment can perpetuate them?

[Ruth]

So purged and beautifully layered..
This is all consuming!
xoxo

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

you are probably sick of me saying amazing but here it is again...THIS PIECE IS AMAZING!!!!

[J. J. Nightingale]

The war within and without .. good description of cognitive dissonance ..

Spit out your venom .. wow .. kinda says it all .. Jasmine

[Jennifer]

OMG, I love it, so dark

[HeIsWe]

I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Priscilla Sayers]

I like it.
Maybe try letting some aggresion out
start a poem with "spit out your venom"
I like that line. See where it takes you. I am interested to see:)

[∂αʌ<..]

tooooooooooo good! :D
im loving...and this is dropping in my favourite list...

[Gilad Levanon]

This is very interesting. It feels as though you're expressing the pain we cause ourselves by our own internal words and you're talking about how, through this, we end up perpetuating the pain by 'spitting out our venom' - by attacking others with the same harsh words with which we attack ourselves. I find this to be surprisingly true - very often, if not always, the things we judge and insult in others are the things we judge and insult in ourselves... and vice versa.

Taking this idea deeper, I find that the things we judge in ourselves are very often the things we fear others will judge and criticize. Very often, our self-inflicted insults are really the echoes of the real or imagined insults of others.

This starts looking like a vicious circle of insult and judgement, and in part, this may be why there is so much hatred in our world. Since suppressing our own self-inflicted insults is obviously not an option for breaking the cycle (that would simply make us more venomous to ourselves and to others, only serving to delay and heighten the damage), there really is only one option if we are to end this cycle of pain - accept ourselves.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

The turmoil within... -that "rage" is always a struggle for us to deal with... we are human, after all... - It's best to release it in a productive way, and you have!- This piece has great Depth. Great Write!