Velveteen

Another dream. I love my dreams.

Awakened on silky haze

Clouds in the depths

Of my wild imagination

Whisked away into enchantment.

 

A sleepy embrace

Of silkened silenced comfort

To get lost and whisked away

Into a timeless treasure.

 

The soft gentle breezes

That caress my cheek

And the paper flowers and leaves

Among the trees begin to sway.

Moving and dancing gracefully

As if to their own songs.

 

Crossed golden paths,

Victorian landscapes

With the small statuettes

And fountains glimmering

In the sunlight.

 

Along with the colored hues

Of my garden in the skies

Leading me to a glowing gate

Waiting to be unlocked

In my clouded atmosphere.

 

Above, everything transforms

The clear blue sky gradually

Turning to a beautiful complexion

Colors painting my darkness

As it fades...giving my blacks and greys

The natural color I have been searching for

Shining brightly like a colorful painting.

 

They swirl and mix together

Creating a new world for me

The universe like I have never seen.

An aurora of bright greens and crimson

Shimmering like silk, glittered with diamonds.

 

Icy comets fly

Among mother planets and their moons

As the gods and goddesses of ancient time

Smile, circling around their master Sun.

 

It all fades into their blackness

And find myself shaded beneath the trees

And clear blue waters and waterfalls

Surrounding me as if flying

With Peter Pan and I have just ventured

On a journey to Neverland...

The land of forever young.

 

In my mind of beauty and magic

I will remain in my clouded haze

To travel the universe as I wish

And soar through my eternal skies.

 

Reviews

[Jetta Zippora]

Perfect writing, enchanting flow. I can't get enough of your poetry, friend. Great, great work.

[tk]

WOW. this piece is just......amazing! it's like you're taking me to a very secret paradise.. very wonderful imagery. there's magic in every line.
"A sleepy embrace
Of silkened silenced comfort
To get lost and whisked away
Into a timeless treasure."

"An aurora of bright greens and crimson
Shimmering like silk, glittered with diamonds."

"Icy comets fly
Among mother planets and their moons
As the gods and goddesses of ancient time
Smile, circling around their master Sun."

I really enjoyed you poem!! :)) GOOD JOB!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem. You took me on a good field trip in your words. I like the places you took me in your words.
"They swirl and mix together
Creating a new world for me
The universe like I have never seen.
An aurora of bright greens and crimson"
The amazing description gave life to the excellent poem.
Coyote

Shimmering like silk, glittered with diamonds.

[Gilad Levanon]

Absolutely beautiful. This is poetic art at its' best. So vivid and deliciously described, it evokes the imagination and the emotion of the reader.

A sleepy embrace
Of silkened silenced comfort
To get lost and whisked away
- I love the way these three stanzas sound, slipping together with the soft hisses and clicks of the 's' and 'c' sounds. To anyone reading, this is how one uses sound devices effectively. The repetition of the sounds is not so obvious that it seems overdone, and the sounds that are repeated are not always at the start of the word. This makes the sound devices flow and enrich the text without drawing too much attention away from the content itself. Read these three lines aloud and you'll see what I mean.

Visually this poem is also brilliant. The extended imagery of painted vivid colours comes together with phrases like 'swirl and mix' and 'aurora' to give the impression of almost preternatural colours that are changeable in a changeable dreamscape world.

I truly do feel like I'm dreaming when I read this. People, this is great stuff, please take the time to appreciate it properly.

[~Sarah~ Idríel T..]

Like Muse said your writing is pure magic! =) At first I love the pic you have choose for your poem! Love the pure deep purpple color!

Well done!

[Muse]

Your writing is pure magic!

Icy comets fly
Among mother planets and their moons
As the gods and goddesses of ancient time

The mind is a powerful thing....so glad you have found a way to share yours! xo

[Shadow in the Dark]

I love the picture! I was picturing the whole thing in my head. It make me think of someone dreaming or someone going to heaven. BUt your dreams put me to shame when i wake up and can't remember anything.

[LilMissWriter17]

Again, beautiful! :) I love all your poems!!

[Amila Jay]

Super write:)

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your dream in techicolour is exhilarating! Velveteen is a lovely word..