I loved reading this. So full of emotion with some wise messages in there too. Love the title too, no need to change that.
I really think the ending was very powerful also: "In the skies of eternity to which we will remain immortal" - beautiful :)
I think that the title is a good fit for the poem. Great poem! When we write it is us pouring out our emotions, thoughts, feelings, and memories and like you wrote we are not God so no matter how hard you try to anwser the questions inside of you you can't.
The written word outlives mere mortal flesh ... Our thoughts and hearts are known to the next generation .. and they reflect our struggles and our joys ...
Perfect Title! Don't change a thing. You a poet who brings music and grace. The footprints and impression left by you.... An immortal soul now a place you hold your existence witnessed.... Your voice is known.
Keep writing, keep growing, keep dreaming.... Fluttered you wings that feverishly raise you up. You Are Flying.
The title seems absolutely perfect for this piece and it is seriously a work of art. We do strive for a sort of immortality within this life, strive to be remembered someway somehow whether it be by our writing or our actions or simply the memory of us that as carried by others whom we have touched in some way that they take along with them.
Mostly regarding writers, we do use our words as a sort of inner reflection of who are are upon the inside and those who read those words don't see them as a part of us necessarily, they tend to look inward and see those words and relate to them within themselves. By relating our writing to themselves is a way for them to remember us because well...we were brave enough to bring it out and forward, sharing those words, those emotions, that rage, that love with the world.
My name is Anna Rose...
what can I say about myself?
I'm 20 learning to live on my own, trying to escape from a dark part of my life. Been writing my heart since I was able to write. I write whate.. more..