Immortal

Special thanks to Priscilla Moore, for her inspiration of this. And everyone else who inspires me, you played a part in this too.

Ink filled pens

Wearing our hearts

In the vulnerable stings

Of broken love and pasts.

Stories to be told

Imaginations soar

Painting the creative aspects

In a search of self-reflection.

 

Pick a color,

Let your rage show

In the constant spills

Like bittersweet lullabies.

 

We are not God,

As we search within our selves

For the answering of burning

Undying questions of reality.

 

We are not infinite...

As humans...

Caught in the idea

To live forever and beyond.

 

We are our words from the wise

Creators of what we choose to be born

In the skies of eternity to which

We will remain immortal.

Author's Note

Not sure about the title though, suggestions will be appreciated.

Reviews

[ThornedBlackRose]

As we search within our selves

For the answer of burning,
Undying questions of reality.
As humans...

We're caught in the idea
Of living forever and beyond.
We get our words from the wise.
Creators of what we choose is born.
In the skies of eternity where
We will remain immortal.
Other than the minor errors above the piece is very well put together.
Nice job.

[Seshat Nidaba]

This was epic and soothing, warm and contemplative. Your choice of subject matter is what grabs me. Perhaps we simply share ideals more so than most. A beautiful gifted write full of light. Let me show you my favorite lines:

1. We are not God,

As we search within our selves
2.In the vulnerable stings

Of broken love and pasts.

[Shattered Dreams]

This is amazing. It's touching, and it made me think. It always amazes me what you can do with words. Lovely. Well done!

[NewYorkNights]

I love this poem a lot, it's beautiful. The word choice is just amazing! Not to mention the topic of it just goes straight to my heart.

[NZane]

I love this one. It sure makes me think. Reflect. Great job ^^

[Janna Nicole]

You have quite a way with words. Very good piece. :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I simply adore the last stanza!

[Ubiquitous]

The message is well delivered and right on the target, I love the language and syntax. Great piece, and I like the title the way it is.

[Narniafan]

I like the reflectivness on who we are. I think the name is great. It fits just lovely.

[adrianbulalacao]

every words...every phrase...every forms of insights is blessed.emotions spills through...what a wonderful and vivid thoughts and imaginations being developed by this poem.. YOU MAKE ME FEEL.-IMMORTAL.