Never And Me

Thoughts of a crush, I suppose.

It's 3 a.m.

And I wonder where you are

As the shadows of you

Fade in and out of my memories.

 

Its 4 a.m.

Wondering what could have been.

Pale blueish eyes, never leaving my sights

Somewhere in between sleep and a dream.

 

Its 5 a.m.

Watching the minutes fly

Of every moment spent together

Somewhere between never and me.

Author's Note

What do you think? I'm not sure.

Reviews

[Raven Starhawk]

The hours tick on and yet seem to never go the way you want them to. Such is the way of life at times. This was magnificently penned.

[Amila Jay]

nice flow:)

[pixieheart97]

I love it!

[Coyote Poetry]

When sleep is hard to find. Easy to fall into dreams and questions. I like the use of time and thoughts. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Crow]

I can't quite put my literary finger on exactly what I like about this piece, but I am certain that I do. There is a pace to this piece, with simplicity, and meaning.

[Words of Thunder]

I like the last two stanzas, except for the word wandering. It implies a motion not seen elsewhere in the work, and I don't really think it fits. You are still in the work. Maybe the unknown subject is wandering...

Overall, not bad.

[KAREN]

Nights that sleep want come and your mind want leave you alone. Your poem is beautiful and written well and so realateable.

[Priscilla Sayers]

I think it is so beautiful honestly. Such a passionate piece. You have been able to paint an image in the readers mind, relating, imeediately, for who has not had those nights. How elloquently wriiten. Sometimes it only takes but a few words to give such intensity to emotion. You my dear are a jewel.

[sounds of shadows]

a nice morsel about a few hours of wondering. enough lines to create the mood, but not overly long.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I love it! It should be recorded as a song.
I think people would eat it up.