Peace of My Heart

A weight of the world

Has been lifted off my shoulders.

My oceans of neverending tears

Dried up, like desert without rain.

 

I have gazed into your eyes

Full of hatred, sorrow, and regret

Nothing but decieving lies

You are the only one to blame.

 

Haunting my dreams

Every memory of darkness past.

You never cared enough

To just let me go and be free.

 

I am no longer afraid,

For there is a peace within my heart

And the heavens replaced my mind

The hell you have caused my lifetime.

 

I am finally free,

Now that you are gone

My spirit has been lifted

My torn wings have been mended.

 

You are no longer here

As my tears dry up,

Like a desert without rain

Peace in my heart, at last.

 

Author's Note

this morning my father was put to death. AND IT IS A WONDERFUL DAY!!!

Reviews

[Alexis]

I'm not quite sure I know how to respond to your Author's Note... I don't know if you're joking or if you're actually serious... Well, either way, I hope everything is alright.
Well, uh, anyways, you did a really great job on this poem. It was full of emotion.


"My oceans of neverending tears

Dried up, like desert without rain."


I love those lines. A very good comparison.
I sometimes find myself "crying oceans of never ending tears" on random evenings. Everything just sends me off in tears, no matter how small it was. That's kind of what I thought of when I read those two lines. But, I suppose crying can be very helpful. Just gotta get it out, right?
There also seems to be a lot of hope in this story (well, poem) when you talk about a weight being lifted off your shoulders, your new freedom, your mended wings, no more tears... If only things could stay that way after being fixed. ...That's a very negative thought - ignore that!
Anywho, you did a wonderful job. Bravo!

[ThornedBlackRose]

The weight of the world
Has been lifted off my shoulders.
My ocean of never-ending tears
Dried up, like a desert without rain.
I gazed into your eyes
Full of hatred, sorrow, and regret.
With nothing but deceiving lies,
you are the only one to blame.
Every memory of past darkness,
haunts my dreams.
You never cared enough
To let me go and be free.
I'm no longer afraid, because there is a peace within my heart.
The heavens replace my mind
From the hell you caused me in my lifetime.
Now that you're gone,
I'm finally free.
My spirit has been lifted;
My torn wings have been mended.
Because you're no longer here
My tears dry up.
Like a desert without rain,
At last, I have peace in my heart.

It was well written but I still offered you some suggestions to improve the flow.

[Priscilla Sayers]

A beautiful poem...

[Waqas Rabbani]

I loved the Style of Writing, and i am saddened by your loss please accept my sincerest sympathies for your emotional trauma, i hope you can now find peace in the absence of your torment.

about your poem i have to say it was amazing and very powerfully emotional although you could have effected minimalism in the execution making the overall effect of your words more powerful in brevity, though that is just my opinion.

still i enjoyed myself reading it, i could relate..




An Open Book on a Slab of Stone
The Wind that Walks between the Leaves
As the Sands of time they Slowly Fall
I Know me Much and Not at all

[Haroon]

the way u expressed your feelings, thats great!!!

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

this is an outstandingly beautiful piece and that's all i have to say...

[Amila Jay]

Nice flow of words, a good write indeed:)

[Sugar and Spice]

wow this is amazing!! i love the last saga, and the line "like a desert without rain". Beautifully written, and desirably haunting :)

[paradise]

fanatstic.. its all i can say bc i know the next one i read will be just as great :D

[kathrina]

Beautiful emotions in this poem. I love it.

[Hazle Eyed Girl]

very interesting. i'm happy that you are at peace and at the same time i wonder what he did to get that sentence u i also know it is probably not my business.
wonderful peace, you did great with expressing your emotions through this and it flowed really well for me