Oceans

I've been depressed recently, so I'm writing the pain away.

 

Hold on tightly to your dreams,

My mind whispers softly to my heart.

Life changes with the shifting tides

Emotions of highs and lows.

 

Sand castles built towards the heavens,

Waves crashing upon the shore.

Crumbling my walls to almost nothing,

When they guarded me with strength and safety.

 

Stricken loneliness, love non-existent

I search around me endlessly

For another pair of footsteps in the sand

But all I can find is my own.

 

Azure blue and emerald green,

Jaded from pain of lost loves.

Only the ocean breeze consoles

Embracing me in it's gentle touch.

 

Hold on to your hopes, ride out the tide

My heart responds to my thoughts.

The future is what you make it, believe

There is beauty within your undying dreams.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Artwork = Ocean's Tears by *Ferelwing of deviantart.com

Reviews

[Raven Starhawk]

Oceans hold vast mysteries. This is a wonderful tribute to color, a heart's dream and even a touch of heartache. I wish I could go into much more detail than that as it has a wonderful underlying message that really makes me think. Especially the stanza "The future is what you make it, believe". ^^*

[Lily Mae]

They say blue represents truth and green the heart.. it would make sense since when we need to think ... contemplate our lives and dream we go to the ocean. This poem shows the gentle power of emotion..xo

[J. J. Nightingale]

The mighty ocean is a source of comfort to many .. sand castles are the stuff dreams are made of, but they can not last, forever .. the tides and times of life wash them away ..
The image you chose is perfect .. . I see strength in your words, and hope ..
Embrace your inner strength . .. the future is yours to live .. smile ..

I Like .. Jazz

[Larry Dyson]

perhaps.."

Sand castles built towards the heavens,

Waves crashing upon the shore.

Crumbling my walls to almost nothing,

When{where] they guarded me with strength and safety. before.

just suggesting ..the counted meter and end line rhyme?..what do you think?..nice prose ....I love your descriptions and with the pics you chose..very nice!difficult to see your depression ..you are voicing the positive so well...except here"I search around me endlessly

For another pair of footsteps in the sand

But all I can find is my own. "
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[Poetic Beauty]

Life is like the ocean shifting and changing. There are things in this world that make you feel safe then then crumble at your feet. Strong details and the imagery painted is clear and clean as the ocean breeze.

[Revery]

"The future is what you make it, believe" That statement is so tremendously true and important. Another wonderful write. Hope your doing well. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem. I like the use of the sea to make you point in the poem.
"Hold on to your hopes, ride out the tide"
Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Dr. Wood ?]

flows like the sea...writing is the best medicine of all

[Julie Morgan]

I really love the second stanza, and as a whole, the poem flows really nicely with itself. Great job!