It's Amazing

Trying something new

It’s amazing.

How you said,

What you told me,

Was not a lie.

 

It’s funny.

All these people,

That never knew to,

Keep it from me

 

You try sometimes,

But could never be.

You tried to prove,

And we’d believe.

 

But hey,

I promise you,

I’ll try again.

I promise you.

 

I tried.

I apologize.

I just couldn’t stop,

Loving you.

Reviews

[InterijentoWrites]

This is a very nice piece. I love the structure, as someone already said. But the way you laid it out is very powerful.

It’s funny.
All these people,
That never knew to,
Keep it from me

In this stanza, I feel like the to at the end of the third should be move to the beginning of the fourth. But thats just me, maybe.

Otherwise, great piece. I loved it.

[InterijentoWrites]

This is a very nice piece. I love the structure, as someone already said. But the way you laid it out is very powerful.

It’s funny.
All these people,
That never knew to,
Keep it from me

In this stanza, I feel like the to at the end of the third should be move to the beginning of the fourth. But thats just me, maybe.

Otherwise, great piece. I loved it.

[Crystal Marie Rome]

Really nice poem and I liked the structure of it.

[Ruth]

What is kept from us will always surface, eventually and sometimes we cannot help but still that person....this is poignantly haunting love...an emotional piece xx

[EricGodsil]

I see. Well now that I understand that I think you did very good at this new thing of yours. Keep it up. :)

[Sbernie18]

The new was i guess the shortness of the lines and words, and such.

[EricGodsil]

What was the new you are trying here? I rather enjoyed the message here. The emotion and the honesty. I have read a few poems on this topic today so I think it is safe to say a lot of people will get this on some sort of emotional level. Which some would argue is a driving factor in great poetry. Being able to evoke emotions out of people that may have been laying dormant.

[amdc101]

Really like this poem. Nice write.