Life

This is the story about life..using indirect words.

Life

What is life but a war we can't win?

What is life but a metaphor of sin?

Why do eyes glow like stars?

Why do people go behind bars?

To ashes the heart shall burn,

To mashes the love shall turn,

Human evil is the title of life,

Human shall never be rife,

These short lines tell the truth,

These short lines share the ruth.

Author's Note

My first poem here,what do you think? I love reviews,be honest,please.

Reviews

[jesserose99]

I like this, and it makes me think...the only line that I am personally not sure about is 'why do people go behind bars'...i don't know, I wonder more How do people live behind bars...or maybe not even that...but you might want to ponder on that one, or not just an idea. I like your flow though, you rhyme very well too.

[BurningPoet]

Thank you for kind words:)

[Dixie Slaughter]

Short and sweet. I liked it.

[BurningPoet]

Thanks miss!

[silverwritinggoddess]

I liked this one. This was straight to the point. I think you got this all in one! That one line about being behind bars...there are so many reasons for that. Countless as a matter of fact. Ah, well. Great job!

[BurningPoet]

Thank you very much :)