Surrounded

Song I wrote, I don't know if it's finished or not.

Don't you know how it feels...

Don't you know you were made just like me?

Just like me...

I don't have have what it takes

To be brought back to this life

Over again.

Over again...

How can you breathe?

How can you live?

Smothered in what you don't want to be.

How can you breathe?

How can you live?

Smothered in what you don't want to be,

Surrounded.

Author's Note

I wrote this in literally about a minute...so...

Reviews

[Boy of the red]

its really good if you wrote it in a minute. i would say just give more aout the concept and the meaning of the poem. but great job!

[Locust]

A minute? Wow, you type and think fast!! Maybe you should add some detail...? Then again, I'm more of a narrative person, so... What would I know? Heh...

[Tai Ryens]

Well, err, I'd say you've done a nice job, considering that it was done in a minute. I'd suggest maybe extending on the concept a bit, maybe add a couple lines to allow it to further enhance the poem.