Lost in a Dream

A long time ago,

Beneath an old oak tree.

Cara lay there,

Dreaming of becoming famous.

Even dreams can become nightmares.

Feelings overbearing her in the big city.

Going nowhere it seems. 

Hell is right at her heels.

If only she could get a break,

Just one break.

Kissing up to strangers to pay her rent.

Losing herself every night to the drugs.

Many nights she is in a different bed with different men.

Never did she think she would be here.

Over and over she tries to dig herself out of this hole.

Popping the whole bottle of pills, she

Quietly falls on her bed.

Resting her sunken in eyes,

She wishes that it didn’t have to end like this.

Time seems to slow down,

Under the blinking lights in her studio.

Venting her last thoughts of this world.

Why did it have to be like this?

Xanthous surrounds her as she goes.

Yapness for the pain to subdue.

Zitella finally can rest in peace.

Author's Note

This ABC poem/story format is based on the song The A Team by Ed Sheeran. Hope you like!

Reviews

[misha]

What an interesting and sad piece. Great job.

[Lina Grey]

I haven't heard the song, just read a lot of poems based off it. I like this one, though I'll be honest I didn't even notice till I got to x, y, and z :P *i'm sloww* but this story is not an uncommon one. I've been to the sity a couple of times, and I hate it. I can't understand the people who put themselves in these situations. I suppose they are all lost in their dreams, not once seeing the nightmare till it is too late.

[Bumble]

xD I think you are so adorable! And yes, sadly this is not an uncommon situation. I have gotten lost in my dreams once or twice. Thankfully I have dug myself out each time. ^-^

[Sami Khalil]

Even dreams can
become nightmares.
A nice write.

[Bumble]

Thank you so much!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[Lori]

Its a sad and all too common story. I haven't heard the song. I'll have to listen to it. I like the line, hell is right at her heels. Btw, you have a pretty face but your photo looks so sad. :(

[Bumble]

Thank you and I will upload one not so sad! n_n

[Lori]

Much better. Cute pic! :)

[Bumble]

^_^ Thank you!

[Athera Rose]

Very nice I really like the story and the format, very well written. :)
I do have a small suggestion though, consider moving the comma to after "pills" from the line "Popping the whole bottle of pills she,"

[Bumble]

Okay! Thanks! n_n

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

I like this and this type of format is not so easy to do but you did it great! (I love that song by Ed Sheeran by the way ;) )

[Bumble]

Thank you! I can't stop listening to it. :]

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

I was like that too when I first heard it, I kept that song on repeat for awhile. lol

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You wrote this wonderfully...to write an intriguing story within this piece, in the ABC format is hard to do! I am amazed...great work!

[Bumble]

Thank you! :D

[Dr. Wood ?]

a very difficult task carried out very well. I have not tried this for years..since i was working as a teacher's assistant...For kids it can be fun but your version is far more adult and compelling

[Bumble]

Thank you! n_n

[Belinda]

I knew it was based off that song when I read it! I was thinking this reminds me of that Ed Sheeran song! and then I read your note and I was right! So good job for bringing this poem and that song together, that should you of ever heard the song you would know this poem was about it.

[Bumble]

Thank you, that song for some odd reason will not leave me alone so I had to write about it!

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow. You really are the queen of this format. I really liked this one. It had an effortless flow.

[Bumble]

Thank you:D