The Story of Reality.

This is the perfect, story book moment

Girl on her knees, a hopeless angel

Searching for a way out, of her misery

Praying for a hero, to steal her heart

 

Dressed in black, he’ll come along

Knowing what she is going through

He’ll put his hands, on top of hers

And when she’s tired, he’ll carry her home

 

All they truly need, is each other

Weak without, the other’s presence

Keeping her whole, he gives her the reason

To put down her knives, and continue her life

 

 Weak and tired, he lends his hand

Repairs her wings, and teaches her flight

A pair simply meant to be together

Better as two, rather than one

 

She closes her eyes, and waits for his touch

His fingertips, dissolving her tears

But she feels only pain, where she cut

Longing for love, to heal her scars

 

The storybook moment, that crashed and burned

The pages of her book, bright with the fire

The smoke and the ashes, of reality

So where is her hero?

 

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

There is a Brutal honesty in this poem. It's almost as if we are witnessing a coming of age tale that is taken over by reality. I feel as if the pain has birthed this girl into a woman and that beautiful naive nature of a child will be forever lost. It is indeed a tragedy to see the light leave ones eyes. I simply hope she wont turn into another cynical apathetic adult. I imagine somewhere a young man feels sad and incomplete for some unknown reason. Hopefully their bond will be realized and he will become a hero.

[Emily]

This is a brilliant melt down of a fairy tale ending into the cruel reality of the things we face every day in our lives. We do not have the blessing or the relief of being able to be rescued from our heartache. I love the way this is written, we think that there is going to be a beautiful ending where they are in love as one complete whole of the two perfect halves. In the 2nd to last stanza I love the line where it switches from fairy tale to reality, when she is not rescued. I'm quite thrilled that you pulled this off so well. You've done it wonderfully. I had to read it a few times to make sure I had the whole thing right.
The piece leaves me with a feeling of reality, a feeling of slight depression, in that I always hope for the happy ending to have it dashed, because in reality they so very often do not happen.

Nice work! Enjoy writing!