The Death Brigade

Regret will kill, a mortal's soul.

The horse’s hooves are covered in blood

Red as the locks, curled in her hair

Both are part, of the death brigade

 

They carry her casket, roofed in regret

The vampires lurk, not far behind

As werewolves howl, in the moonlight

 

Demons are summoned, from deep below

To conquer the angels, who still subsist

To stifle the fairies, and dance on your grave

 

Death’s chant does carnage, the sinner’s army

The mortal who strike, with forceless swords

And all who listen, to its tune

 

Then, suddenly, a break in their hymn!

“What mortal does lye, inside death’s tomb!”

As the demon holds, his eyes on her stone

 

The lid creaks open, a treacherous sight

As death’s tight scream, clings to your throat

For here, lye’s your soul!

 

Be a lesson to all, the demon proclaims

This coffin is proof, as it seals your fate

Regret is a poison, that kills every mortal

 

The murder continues, loud through the night

As the dead now proceed, to bury alive

Proof that regret, shall kill every mortal

 

The horse’s hooves are covered in blood

As the demons whisper… their murderous words...

On with the death brigade!

 

 

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was spooky and scary. You make use of some good descriptive lines here as well. I might suggest that you change "lye" to "lie". "Lye" is a potassium carbonate chemical leached from wood ash; also called sodium hydroxide. It's funny how one little letter can change the entire meaning of a word but it does.

[ebur™]

This was AMAZING! It gave me that dark feel around me and I loved the first stanza and the last stanza. I especially loved how you worded and wrote the poem. Just great.

[Manda]

OMG! I CANT BELIEVE YOU WROTE THIS! ITS SO AMAZING! You write so wonderfully. This was evil and and super dark. I got hooked after the first couple lines...! amazing! keep it up!

[(Super) Heroes Never Di..]

I absolutley loved it! The first stanza where you first say "death brigade" and in the title is really interesting and it made me curious about the rest of the poem. The whole thing flowed really nicely and its exceptionally dark and totally evil - just the kind of poems that I enjoy. I also love the werewolf and vampire lines. Fantastic!