Confidence

A poem about the loss of confidence.

Confidence

They say it's what makes you the star
But still I'm stuck, hiding every scar

They say there's nothing wrong with me
But the person I really am, they must not see

For inside I'm bleeding
And it's you I'm needing

City lights, always shine bright
But still my sky is dark tonight

This shadow steals my vision
As I wait for the final collision

When will the stars appear?
When you will be near?

Confidence

I have none left, now you are gone
A fake smile I have now drawn

They call it depression

It means pain, it means meds
The need to rip your life to shreds

There is no escaping
This life of mine needs reshaping

But still you are not there
And I begin to wonder, if you even care

Burn away my dark sky
Ask me how, ask me why

Confidence

Where has it disappeared?
Now that I live the life, I've always feared

Reviews

[William]

some of the rhyming sort of hemmed you in--that's personally why i prefer freestyle. unless you're really, really, really good at rhyming, it ends up sounding corny and juvenile, which i think happened in a couple lines here, mainly: "But the person I really am, they must not see" and "A fake smile I have now drawn".
the rhymes force you to switch words around, so it sounds forced and painful, not flowing.
but that aside, it's not bad at all. like i said, rhyming poems aren't personally my favorite, but i think you did as much as you could with what you had. :3
also, right here, " Now that I live the life, I've always feared " is "Now that I live the life I've always feared"--I'm pretty sure the comma there is grammatically incorrect.