HoneyStung

For Pete. A follow up to The Love Divide.

It was just a little prick

and you let yourself in

and I

honeystung

mistook it for love

of the soul kind

blind

but I took what you gave

flesh, blame and pain.

In your consumption

you broke my bones

evoked long dead ghosts

and made me your home.

I shed bruised skin

and donned another one

but could never fathom why

the flowers still died.

And the years crept by

and the love didn't quite

meet your beautiful eyes.

They came and went

the girls with the curls in

the middle of their forehead.

And the love divide

became wide as the 1000^th

sun chased the moon

across the sky, while

crevices in my skin wept

but my eyes remained dry

Folded in your paper origami

I moved my hips for you

yet blood red womb

remained silent,

hot rum flooded my veins

and I sang lullabies anyway

inside the house that

fell from the dark sky.

Smoke and mirrors, Chinese whispers

I'm not oblivious to

the chant of those

who fold me in warm arms,

binding masks, hidden battle scars,

while the storybook

is narrated by only one

But I, your paper origami, is still

breathing with life.

Reviews

[Ayvid N]

The poem to me spoke of the dark side of relationships, two people bound together, yet on different planes with different ways of approaching a relationship. The attitude and actions of one, hurting the other, who is more invested.

"And the years crept by
and the love didn't quite
meet your beautiful eyes."

This is so sad...It says everything. Great imagery and beautiful chosen words make it a very appreciated piece for me... Thank you for sharing.

And I loved the Artwork....

[Bubo]

Thank you so much for your time and thoughts. Yes it is sad how love can manifest over the years xx

[Ayvid N]

Yet some relationships are so treasured, we endure. You are most welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the references to the Chinese whispers and the origami and what happens as the heart is manipulated---and the love goes deep into the raw bones of feeling...

this really moved for me...and moved me...a pureness of wording.
j.

[Bubo]

Thank you so much for taking the time to review and leave your lovely thoughts

[Fran Marie]

A Sad woeful love story told with intense emotions eminating from the depth of the soul..I can feel the pain within this poignant piece of poetry..so very well written and deeply expressed

[Bubo]

Thank you so much for your review and thoughts

[barleygirl]

I'm not sure I'm following any more than 50% of this message, but that which I do understand feels like a deep & conflicted version of love, quite common in relationships I've seen. I mostly appreciate your original manner of expressing yourself here, full of startling imagery, such as the origami analogy & girls with curls from the well-known nursery rhyme. I'd stay longer to delve further, but I seem to be hitting on many bleak messages this morning and I need a breath of hope now.

[Bubo]

I think the words speak clearly of a struggle in love. There isn't always a message in writing, sometimes if read more than once it becomes clearer these are emotions that all humankind face at some point, and every emotion has a story rather than message. Thank you for your time in reviewing.