Are you okay?

They drug me to the river,
beat me till I turned blue.
Pack mentality, taunting,
and I’m just praying for a clue.

The delicate flower,
her limbs tired,
body aching,
her heartstrings unwired.

The susceptible cowards,
with their numbers and their power,
no one is ringing the bell tower for me,
and the world begins to feel,
a whole lot rounder.

They drug me to the river,
beat me till I turned blue.
Pack mentality, taunting,
and the next thing I knew was you.

I saw you for the first time
and I licked my lips.
“Are you okay?” you say,
but I was born for this apocalypse.

You’re smiling with worry,
holding me steady with such urgency,
I sense safety.
I sense your strife,
I can feel how real you are,
I can feel that you’re beautifully alive.

I saw you for the first time
and I licked my lips.
“Are you okay?” you say,
but I was born for this apocalypse.

Yeah,
I was just praying for a clue.
And the next thing I knew,
I was looking at you.

Author's Note

It's as simple as it sounds, and pretty meaningful for me. So Enjoy (:

Reviews

[Lina Grey]

Brilliant and beautiful. I like the repitition, imagery, and simplicity. It starts in media res, but the past-tense makes it seem like a vivid memory. The beginning was very strong, well-complimented by the fast-paced flow and rhyme scheme. Then, near the middle, the pace sort of slows, as if the reader is experiencing it and calms down a bit. The strong ending is very bittersweet. Although not directly included, the emotion in this piece is extremely evident. Thank you.

[Moflo]

I like the repetition of this piece a lot. Also I think the simplicity helps this piece to stand out, it is very nicely written.

[Leslie Philibert]

Good poem,the rhyme scheme with its fast tempo contradicts the violent content in the first verse,it produces an interesting effect.I notice you employ the American drug instead of dragged. Anyway,well written work.

[PieceMaker]

wow.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was written very well, the words tell a sad story, but the smile upon the person's face with the out stretched hand is beautiful and the sigh of relief is audible!

[RainQueen]

Wonderful. The picture you painted of the woman beaten down, hopeless - Looking up to see the outstretched hand, the kindness in the eyes...Just beautiful~