As he was known to do

Reflections from the television,
purples, green, reds and blue.
He must have been watching the evening news,
as he was known to do.
I did not hear a word and I did not discourse.
If he was speaking, it was not with remorse.
He was pausing his violation to chew up his food,
as he was known to do.
“Go fall away to your woven wonderland,”
I swallow his words like liquid quicksand.
He was spewing impudence thicker with each brew,
as he was known to shamelessly do.
I was gazing out towards the sunset sky,
“You’re obstinately mindless if you think you’re to fly”
Never an unseen juncture to instill,
I am the irrelevant scratch catching rain on your windowsill.
He said “you’re insubordinate, not worth the rue.”
Then he turned and walked away,
as he was known to do.
Digging through my pockets for my “composed and sluggish” smile,
In accordance, the burden of proof keeps me placid for a while.
He was pressing against me, as my tears became his loot,
and he was calling it intimacy,
as he was known to do.
And I bargain with the peacemakers,
for the afflictions through my skin,
every time he went to put his hands all over it.
If I were to weep, I’d prove inadequate.
If my heart were a sidewalk, it would stretch to no approximate end.
He was belittling me, under the bottoms of his shoes.
And he was walking all over,
as he was known to do.
Reflections from the television,
purples, green, reds and blue.
He must have been watching the evening news..

Author's Note

Reviews would be appreciated on this one;
I stepped out of my comfort box for sure, so I'm not completely surefooted about its outcome. Thanks for reading(:

Reviews

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

ok, here's why I thumbed down the review below me...
NOT because it was rude or mean, but because it was lacking in mental faculties and basically had nothing useful or constructive....
it's abstract and has words/theme you don't understand so it's obtuse??? lol
all good poetry is sposed to be a little abstract...
quite I often I prefer poems to be harder to fathom, not less..but this poem is only supposed to require study to inspect its subtleties, as it's straightforward for the most part..and as it should be, considering it's theme, which I will get to in a moment.
"tighten up" what does that even mean? and where are the suggestions for this vagary? lmao
oh, the "I'm far too mentally lazy to give this poem a chance mentality" it shakes my head like a child shaking a ragdoll every time...
"but I do get that this is a not so nice person who hurt the heroine."
more vagary and a half-assedness (more so patting urself on the back for not being useful than anything, tho)
It's (on the surface) about someone (perhaps pseudo intellectual, etc.) putting the writer down for being creative...said and implied in gestures and subtle comments..it's become so commonplace it's inferred in even the most mundane and small talk conversations and filtered into intimate moments, to such a degree that it has sullied moments that should be sacred
it's about a sensitive soul being subtly tormented by someone who lacks self-awareness/creativity and projects insecurities...the watching the news reference, implies that the person takes in whatever nonsense is fed to them through mediums such as the media and reflects back an heir of false superiority...How is this so mysterious?
I didn't read this a dozen times...
but yeah, your grammar is perfect and clear..the theme is quite easy to follow, yet interesting and uses great imagery and language..nothing cliche or pretentious
ok, so yeah, based on the picture and the fact that you're saying you "stepped out of your comfort zone", I'm guessing this could easily be read allegorically as a monolog, where you are facing your own fears about stepping outside your box, and wanting to push yourself, and some voice is saying, no, don't...and using the illusion or duality of an oppressive lover is quite brilliant, whether you meant it as one or the other or both..well done, no matter how you read it..it's no surprise it would be received so poorly by someone so obstinate that they refused to read it all..it's the only way I can imagine someone not enjoying this

[MachinaWriter]

First impressions: moving, good scheme and well placed repetition, it has technique as well as heart. The act of alternating between the derogotory quotes (I especially liked the one that reminds her that she can't fly as she stares at the sunset, further highlighting something passing her by with the passing of the day) and the lines of self reflection. It adds a layered dynamic to each part that, whether intentional or not, begs to be read again for further, and separate, revelations. Some poems are like that. There's a mystery in the specificity that only the poet knows the truth of, and yet a deep feeling of familiarity to those that read it, which is perfect for creating a tangible emotional connection that can be revisited again and again. I look forward to re-reading it in the future.

Technical aside: I'd suggest changing the line "as he was known to shamelessly do" to "as he was shamelessly known to do", simply because it preserves the repetition scheme you've built, which is really nice. This is, however, down to personal taste and how it sounds to the individual ear. Accent can change a big part in things like that, so it's always down to the writer at the end of the day. Once again, great and tpoem hank you for sharing.

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend,
A very thought provoking write that is a window into you pneuma, well done.

Blessings, Laughing-Bear

[zainul]

Looks like a song with repetition of "as he was known to do".
I appreciate your amazing effort to bring the information you intended to focus.
You can now fine tune this taking more time.

[Harry Alston]

I thought this was excellent, love your use of repetition and the circular structure to the whole poem. Great.

[Lavon Forkeeps]

Thank you (:

[BLBrown]

This is quite the journey. I like how you repeat the title throughout the poem. There is much imagery here and use of obtuse language. I myself enjoy writing the abstract poem now and then. I confess some of this I don't understand, but I do get that this is a not so nice person who hurt the heroine. I find it hard to balance obtuse and concrete so that the reader can derive meaning...that is the challenge. You might consider more balance on the concrete side of things if that's what you want to achieve.

If this were my poem I'd probably spend some time tightening it up. You've laid down all of the thoughts, and there is rhyme in some places so maybe just less wordy and strengthened rhyme schema would help the flow. The first 8 lines have consistency and flow about them that could be carried throughout.

These are my thoughts anyway.

Good poem!