The Truth About The Dead Girl

A tragedy that knew end, but the hidden one knew a little bit more. The faceless champion of humanity gathers all around, urging all to keep on living. RIP Katie Shoults

Talked to you the other day,

Funny, you're still dead.

Left the world behind,

But I know the truth,

There was more than a crash,

Necroscope, bring truth,

Infernal shaman,

Here's my take.


You left this world a year ago,

Leaving all that you know,

Depression wasn't your friend,

All those years you pretended,

The past wasn't so,

You still couldn't let go.


Marching time, tears swelled,

Teen to adult, nights you sulked,

Your father destroyed you,

Raped you in your youth,

Pushed away his family,

Left you of little belief,

Faith left you crying,

Your soul began dying,

Life became trying,

Your image you hated,

Turned to drugs and drink,

Was it all to forget about your rapes?


You were unhappy, please, believe,

That your old friend didn't forget,

From that moment we first met,

You wanted friendship, compassion,

I'll give it to you, even in death,

Katie, I love you, my friend,

Don't forget those moments we spent,

When all you could do was listen,

Sharing what makes you happy,

It was enough for us,

Now life has passed you,

Silence is your only truth.


Dawn to dusk,

Ashes to musk,

Now you're dead,

What's to be said?

I'm sorry,

I didn't bleed,

A river of misery,

For the girl I can't let go.

I'm sorry!

Author's Note

All comments and reviews will be repaid in full. Regards.

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

A heartfelt sadness to this piece...to lose love ones is so painful..yet feeling the connection still and communicating ..beyond..the physical realm.there's always. More truth to be told..you tell it well ..

[Anne Martin]

This is good. I feel the tragedy and the loss. Can I make a radical suggestion? Read the last stanza on its own. Just that, without the rest. That is the kernel of this work, and I think it would stand alone. One thing I might also suggest is just formatting. Rather than a normal RTN at the end of each line, use a Shift-RTN, which will not leave all the blank space. (Save a normal return for when you want a blank line.) It makes it easier to read and interpret the stanzas. It used to be that way by default here. I don't know when it changed. As you can see in my reviews, I'm all about paring things down to the bare essentials, to distill meaning out of the smallest number of words. Writing haiku is a good practice for that. I'm trying to write a haiku a day on my WP at the moment. I don't know how long it will last, but it is amazing how much meaning you can put in 17 syllables.

[Bryad Polis Valentino]

I wrote this on my phone and not my windows 10 Laptop. The formatting may be messed up but because of a injury during one of my assignments I can't always move around much as I like to.

Idk what you are pulling here but my friend Triss is getting annoyed. What are you here just to pick apart my writing and not treat me as a being?

Where's is the obvious human side of you? Not this writer robot garbage.

I've lived this long to listen to someone not believe they are an actual person?

[Bryad Polis Valentino]

Any mistakes in the last comment I apologize. You try moving around in my condition. You wouldn't be able to. Praise the moon for its mercy.

Are you done yet riding your high horse?

[Anne Martin]

I don't ride a high horse. That is just how you are interpreting it. I'm just giving my honest opinion. I don't just fawn over everyone that I read. I give suggestions, which you are free to take or not. What are you looking for on this site? Acolytes, or honest critique.

[Bryad Polis Valentino]

What I'm looking for doesn't matter. I can't tell you something personally unless one respects me.

I'm a special type of hunter and very few things serve me. I don't need to discuss theology and my own philosophy when it seems one wishes to only speak down to me.

If you want to know about what I do, then try and figure out which one of my weapons is biggest.

Realize I quarrel with your kind all the time and it's amusing. You women don't ever understand anything at all it seems.

This is my story. People would die to know me. I am not saying I'm all that great. In fact, I'm mad, bad, and you don't want to know me.

Isn't that what you clearly keep on stating?

[Anne Martin]

You don't know anything about me. You don't even know what my kind really is. You've already told me what your weapon is: Pride. Mine is cynicism. I bow before thee.

[Bryad Polis Valentino]

Yes but I don't hate you guys. I can't give you what you want from me. I can grant people most of their wishes as long as it is possible. You have to tell me.

Idk I have a million websites. I have a lot of assignments that get handed to me.

Your blood ain't that rich, though, hun.

I have plenty of admirers if you thought wrong. I have a bit of Loki in me.

I'm old enough to know when someone is beyond reproach, and you are. Put your guard down.

But don't leave any openings. Window, door, portal, it don't matter to me.

[Bryad Polis Valentino]

Disregard what I may have said. If you ever want to talk, that's fine, but I'm not going to say you're an amazing women blah blah blah. Jen, and Triss are. I say someone else, I'm losing one of my weapons.

[Anne Martin]

I didn't ask anything of you. I freely offered my opinion, which you are free to dismiss. You reviewed a work of mine, and I reviewed in return, as you said you do on your profile page. You requested friendship. I acquiesced. Then you turned nasty. I'm done here.

[Bryad Polis Valentino]

Look everyone I won another duel. She's crazy jealous. Go Leviathan!

[Toni.S]

Very tragic, but also very common amongst little girls, who get robbed of their youth, their ability to love and trust in others.What a selfish set of parents. What a great job capturing this onto paper.

[Aurora]

Reading this has made me shudder. How can someone's life be cut so brutally short, and even the life that was, was so terribly tragic. Deeply moved. Can't write.