Shadowing Thoughts

"Leave me alone" said the girl as she looked up towards the sky, 

Looked back down and then ran

She ran and ran and ran 

She ran away from that man, as fast as she could

She knew he was trouble, thoughts of what he might do to her crept into her mind

So faster and faster her long legs kept on working 

Around the corner, through the dark alley

Looking for someone, for anyone

"Help me," she screamed "Please someone help"

Running, still running, as fast as she could

Her breathing was getting heavy 

How much more could she go?

And then in that instant 

She quickly turned around

She stopped in her tracks, as no man was to be found

That's when she realized 

She wasn't running from him, or anyone for that matter 

She was running from herself

What she thought was a man, was simply her imagination 

She was running from her deepest, darkest thoughts

Scared that when she opens her mouth, they might come out and live to haunt her

Reviews

[Nikolas]

Hmmm, this reminds me of an existentialist poem by Stephen Crane. I like the idea behind the poem, it's meaning. I don't particularly see anything wrong with it. I would play around with the form so that it doesn't just present itself as a big block. Add stanzas, emphasize the important lines. Then ask yourself how your title relates to your poem, because while it is an interesting poem, I don't see much of a connection other than that her imagination manifesting her thoughts as a man which frightened her. When relating to the poem it's just a bit... disappointing. But that's just my opinion.

[Brooklyn]

Thank you very much for the feedback. I really appreciate it. It was kind of just something I threw together and didn't put much thought into, so I'll consider your suggestions.