A tale of a heart

It's a love story what else.

So this starts out with every good intention but every worse night mare inside it self when thinking about that girl who has been on your mind for over a week. You start with hello. Everything starts with a simple hello, but in your case it started with a joke and a laugh. No matter how hard i was thinking the hurting would never stop only the pain in my side form our crazy talks and jokes couldnt over consume the pain in my side and after a night of laughing and continuing to learn from mistakes and lonely nights ask where she was i could turn and see you. You've made me happy i will not lie, You've hurt me a little with the distance and the other smaller things, but the first time you said i love you was the light on top of the toward guiding me in from the sea of lost memory's but no matter how the tide changes of how often its sails set course always looking forward the light at the end of the endless ocean of thought and comfort. No matter how many times ive been rejected in the past the feeling of being powerless and not able to continue onward has been harsh and even though the madness ive seen you as my stand guard. Has the shepherd finally found his own guardian angel? even though it might not seem that way it has come to play out like that or how the vice grips warps the heart squeezing and locking its narrow grip on tender muscle, not hurting but slowly melting onto it like a flower wilts in winter but comes back in the spring never leaving but its thought always living on in the back of a photo album. Standing strong, Waiting on your call and shaking from the head ache and rapid heart beat. all knowing.    Shepherd <3

Reviews

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I think the way you penned this is beyond wonderful... the story is a fast read but it doesn't feel like you left anything out. The descriptions are beautiful, unique in their own ways even with the few common ones like wilting flowers you gave a personal spin on each. I don't know why but there is one line here that particularly stands out to me: "Has the shepherd finally found his own guardian angel?" I know it's a small part of what you are saying, but it really did catch my attention. Wonderfully written line. The lack of capitalization for the word "I" really shows your stand (or the character's stand) on the situation and I think it really does emphasise even more how important this other person is.

I wish I had found this piece sooner, it is completely stunning.

[Brooksfield]

Thank you, i'm glad you enjoyed it.

[ScottWinchester]

Dude. You nailed it. I'm not kidding. The prose is long-winded, which is good; it reads out very quickly that way, which is certainly preferable. But the bread and butter of it all is in the descriptions, confessions that you feel but rarely voice.

Excellent.

Later.

- SW

[Brooksfield]

Thank you, I found in constructive as i waited for this girl to call me back Via skype or phone. Of all sort's of places to confess to a girl, Why not do it where you feel comfortable. A note book can be left in the rain or forgotten somewhere, Misplaced or burned but here this will live on forever. My confession as it is. Thank you very much for the review.. It means alot that you've posted this, Have a good one and thank you again! Also be safe.. :)

[ScottWinchester]

No problem man. Meant every word lol. Peace.