Can't Beat Me Down Just Yet

I live in the shadows and hide from the light
Behind this wall is a very ugly sight
I build my walls brick by brick
They keep me safe but somehow sick
I fear the outside world and all it has to offer
Life sometimes isn't worth the bother
My days of joy are dear to me
Depression cripples me for everyone to see
Most my days are spent far away
My mind is distant and never wants to come back to stay
I fight for myself and things I deserve
It's hard to see the bright side even while telling yourself the right words
I dream for better times to come
I wait until I can't anymore so I go numb
Why do I black out and forget who I am?
I lose sight of where I'm going and don't give a damn
But that's not the real me and I want you to understand
I have a heart of gold and I try to do all I can
I have my days where I am proud
I feel grace and feel like myself is found
I do good and help my people
I just want to survive and somehow feel equal
Taking time to truly feel
Can slowly kill you as you try to heal
Don't let it beat you just yet
I have so much to give and goals I haven't met

Reviews

[Stefano Segnan]

Sorry, I reviewed then I accidentally deleted it ):
This is what I wrote: a longer verse followed by a shorter one is usually a smart move because it adds to the overall rhythm of the poem. However, it is hard to write like this at times because it may limit what the writer has to say. As for the rest, the imagery is vivid and I only miss some punctuation.

[KBW]

I appreciate your review very much. Thank you for reading and continue to read if desired!

[A hare off]

This poem began sliding slowly down into the sadness but was lifted nicely towrds the light in the end. Very nicely written.

[KBW]

Thank you for your input. I feel a lot of sadness in this life but I feel the need to share the light that always shines through at the end of the tunnel