story

this was a school story remake for briar rose

In 1997, there was a beautiful place everyone wanted to live in. There was a

wealthy couple that lived there. It was a beige, five story house, with dark brown window

sills, and there was a small tower on top of the house. There was a beautiful garden that

everyone wanted. The couple had no children, even though they wanted a little girl, there

was no chance open. The husband, Daniel Rodriquez, was always writing, and his wife,

Rosalinda Rodriguez, was always in the garden. They both were very nice to everyone in

the neighborhood, they were nice and they had loving hearts.

 

In the garden there were, carnations, narcissus, roses, lillies, sunflowers, and

daisies. There was a lake behind the garden, and Rosalinda loved feeding the ducks

everyday during the evening. She would go to the lake at five and feed the ducks bread and

crackers. One day, she was a little bit late then normal, when she got there, there were no

ducks in the lake. Five minutes later, five ducks had appeared out of no where. One of the

ducks had fishing net wrapped around its leg, so Rosalinda, carefully helped the duck get

untangled from the fish net. efore she had left, the duck had said "Now that you have saved

me, I shall return the favor in giving you your wish. You will have a little girl soon."

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Five months later, Rosalinda had a beautiful girl named Maria. Daniel had an idea,

he would throw the baby a party and everyone could give her a present sent for a certain

age. On the fifth of May, 1998, Daniel and Rosalinda threw the baby a party. There were

alot of people, some were from Daniel's family, and some were from Rosalinda's. There

are some people who weren't invited but shown up anyways. She didnt know anyone

truthfully. When it came to present time, everyone gathered around, and one by one, opened

the presents for Maria. The people who weren't invited had given her a present that she

had to open up so it would be a surprise to everyone. The time when she had to open it up

was when she was eighteen. She was to be hurt badly and go into a coma because of how

bad she got hurt. Everyone had left and everyone went to bed.

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The year she turned eighteen, she had gotten a car, a cell phone, and her lifetime

dream, a sewing machine. The sewing machine was given to her when she was one year

old. One day when her parents weren't home, she was working on her dress. She was

working on it for awhile and a half an hour after she started she had gotten injured like she

was supposed to. She had gotten herself loose from the machine and had called the hospital

but she couldnt speak. She fell backwards and was out. When her parents got back she

was still laying on the ground with the phone in her hand. They immediatly grabbed her

and put her in the car. When they reached the hospital, she wouldnt wake up. They stitched

her up, and still she wouldnt wake up. They kept her in the hospital and she never woke up.

They had to bury her cause she never woke up for 80 years. She never ever changed her

look.

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Six years later, an old retired doctor, had told his son about the little girl that had a

coma for 80 years and never ever looked different. Alot of people tried to wake her but no

one ever succeded. The son, Caleb Sanchez, tried and tried to wake the little girl up. After

a half an hour of being with her she finally had came awake. Caleb had kissed her and she

woke up. She wondered why he was hovering over her, but she didnt care he had a hold of

her and they had kissed once again, and they lived happily ever after.

Reviews

[Jeremy Haynes]

Very good.